12.31.2013

New Year's Resolutions

Hey-oh all of you out in the internet world!

A new year is rolling around, and bloggers everywhere are talking about resolving themselves to greater and grander things.  Honestly, I'm no exception.  Making New Year's resolutions help me to focus on what I want instead of drifting aimlessly from day to day.  If you don't do resolutions, I highly recommend that you do.  In consideration that your goals are actually reasonable, you'll see that you have more drive, that you feel more accomplished, and that you actually get things done.

Concerning writing, I simply said in my resolutions for 2013:

-I want to write my story for 1 hour minimal, 7 times a week.
-I want to write a spiritual book of memoirs for girls in the next generation.

As I look at those two points, I tilt my head and say, "Wow.  That's pretty miserable.  I definitely did not write an hour every day of the week, and that book that I was intending on writing ended up getting drowned out as I realized throughout the year how spiritually broken I am; I mean, forget even thinking about instructing others."
On the other hand, while I may have failed both of those points, here are some other things that God providentially did throw at me:
   -I got back to co-writing with my heroic, godly, amazing brother.
   -I got to begin a role-playing-ish blog with some of my most cherished mentors and dearest friends.
   -I wrote a dozen or so poems (whose whereabouts are scattered and, therefore, hard to accurately count).
   -When they're all added up, all the self-memoirs I wrote would probably fill an entire notebook.
   -I posted 146 blog posts!!!
   -I wrote an entire short story for this guy, which is an effort that I have never made before.
   -I finished editing Death Would Be So Near, an old story, and put it on the shelf, considering it a good 400 or 500 hours of the 10,000 necessary to become a technical "writing master".
    -I started a new, full-length story (whose title I am still without) that is being posted monthly on this site.

Crazy, isn't it?  While it may seem like I let down my resolutions, I feel like I went over and above what I demanded of myself.  If you take the time to list out your writing accomplishments this year, I bet that you'll also see a good deal of improvement.

This year, I've said:

-I want to write my story for 1 hour minimal, 7 times a week.
-I want to write the sequel to The Immortals.
-I want to write at least three pieces of thanksgiving poetry each month.

Even though those aren't super crazy, I know and trust that creativity will break my restrictions and all sorts of glorious words will spill out.

What are your writing resolutions and victories?

Write on!
Clove

12.24.2013

Text from Halloween - Night Clouds

1. Listen.  Silence settles in the cloud-cloak
over the graying straight of sylvan grounds.
Treading softly there, a stranger who’s set
to stalk the leaf-rugs of the sleeping trees
with lit torch, hardened staff, and gleaming knife,
lifts her eyes up to the taupe canopy.
The branches’ scraping signifies winter;
an icy gale pierces her slender back.

At the hollow tree, whose trunk is heightened
10. by time and tortured by lordly-lightning,
the girl stops and waits, black eyes stabbing night
in hopes of sighting the boy, her release.
Silent as currents under a glass-strait,
the boy appears, his slate-hued cloak snapping
with vigor of life in wind behind him.

He greets her with an eager smile of heat,
a laugh so gentle, it annihilates
the darkness, shadows, and bitter silence.
The two together terminate rawness
20. with fire, light, and flavorful discourse.
Around the blazes, they let down their hoods,
drape their cloaks across each other’s shoulders,
and stare at the flickering, friendly flames.

The spicy snake-sparks that slither up, up
try their hardest to reach the pearly moon,
but individually, they each fail.
She lifts her gaze and feels rain fall down, down.
“What hopelessness exists in each,” she says,
“Fire would return to golden heaven
30. while water would destroy vice-ridden earth.”
“Both result in perfection,” he counters,
“yet they do so through different methods.”

The boy sits beside her, pale skin gleaming
with sweat from the flames, veined hands glowing soft,
ebony eyes stoked with bold-hearted hate,
an expression that she put into him.
His broad black back rises and fades away
but returns with logs secure in each fist.
Methodically, he inclines forward
50. over the fire, hides his face in cloth,
and steps in the coals, tossing a log in
and gazing at the shower of hot sparks
as they rise in front of his sharp, clenched jaw.
Without even glancing at her small frame,
he returns twice to add more dry-fodder,
then after his third drop, he fades away
to black and penetrating loneliness.
He ducks low and sprints into the forest.
leaving the female alone to nighttime.

Write on!
Clove
P.S. This is a dramatized, little piece about what I did last Halloween at a Reformation Celebration.  If you notice, it's in the style of Beowulf, complete with kennings and alliteration.  ^_^

12.21.2013

CHAPTER 4 - Author's Notes

Hey one, hey all, welcome back!  :)

Of course, you all have already met my energetic male protagonist Millis here, so I won't say much more on him.  I'm hoping that his personality came out a little more as you read the chapter, but, like many others, he'll be back again and again, so, if you don't understand him now, just wait.  His back-story shall be explained soon enough...  *evil laugh*

Hyn, on the other hand, I talked about very little in my last section of author's notes, so I suppose it's time I discussed him here.
Originally, I got inspiration for Hyn off of Nathaniel T., a friend of a friend's older brother.  x)  Our whole meeting process was as strange as it probably sounds, but he left quite the impression on me in that he was able to smoothly get anyone and everyone to laugh.  I mean, honestly, we hadn't even gotten past introductions when I was clutching my sides, no joke.

He's in the back to the right with that massive smile.

My reaction to such an alive character?


As I was building Hyn, I admit that I did indeed get inspiration off of Disney...  *gasps*  After all, Hyn's the stereotypical cocky hero, and, in a small way, he reminded me a good bit of Flynn Rider from Tangled.


In the end, however, I still haven't found the right cast for Hyn.  The pictures that I find are always slightly off somehow - brown eyes, the wrong build, or brown hair.
...so.
If you could take all of the correct elements:

Blue eyes...

...a proper build... 
...and blond hair...
...and mash them all together, you'd get Hyn.

Moving right along, I mention briefly a girl named Rea, who is Hyn and Millis' intelligence agent.  She's pretty young - about fourteen - and, for right now, she's not that important.  Later on, though...
*even more evil laugh*



Last but not least, you have Millis and Hyn's mysterious employer, who...well...I can't tell you who HE is, now can I?
*most evil laugh*

I hope you guys liked the chapter!  Feedback and edits are always appreciated.  Also, if missed a chapter or two or three, feel free to leave a comment telling me so, and I'll find a way to get you all filled in.

Write on!
Clove

12.20.2013

CHAPTER 4

Ladies and gentlemen:
Flu season.

I was in a 104˚F fever on Saturday, I was retching on Sunday, I was blowing my nose like a trumpeter on Monday, and I've been coughing like a horse ever since.  Why I didn't get more writing done during that period of time, well, beats me.  :)

This is very overdue, so let's not waste time with introductions, eh?

~ ~ ~ 

Hired
December 10, 3013
9:56 P.M.



   Head down, hood up, Millis paced through the airport halls.
   He looked deceptively small with his physique hidden in the folds of his loose clothes.  Small, but indistinguishable among the dark-haired, bronze-skinned people of Southern Excellia.
   And for now, that was desirable.
   Twenty meters behind him was Hyn, shuffling along in the cool manner of any high-class business man who knew how to handle himself professionally.
   Twenty meters behind Hyn was Rea, appearing too young to be worth trouble.
   Stereotypical had been and would be the name of their mission’s cloak until the three companions were back in ELI, safe and hidden in their realm of equals.  But despite every effort made to keep quiet and inconspicuous, Millis still felt glances cast at his back, questioning his status and affairs.
   Disguises.
   Millis muttered a curse under his breath.
   The equivalent of failures.
   Evidently, the fools behind the masking orchestration had given no forethought to Rea’s attraction to the real world.  When the sixteen year old girl had opened her suitcase to find she had received a pair of denim shorts, an explosively colored tank-top, and a collection of gaudy accessories, she had changed--immediately--and pranced around the hotel living room, chatting nonsensically in a British accent.  Hyn eventually lost it and had knocked her to the ground, smudging black carpet filth on her new clothes.
   Millis smirked unconsciously under his hood.
   Central ELI had also seemingly forgotten that Hyn never enjoyed any part of a mission aside from the raw basics and focus of action.  It was in his blood as a Rager.  He was naturally agitated, bred for the high-concentration work of a mercenary, not for the clownish shenanigans of a spy.
   And for that matter, so was Millis.
   It was due to the dual nature of ELI that the getups had been made mandatory.  While supposedly government funded and utilized, other antigovernment bodies frequently hired ELI’s trained assassins for their own uses, Millis and Hyn being no exception.  The chances of being spotted by an Excellian security guard and identified as a local criminal were more likely than it would appear.  One too many discovered assassins had given ELI a bad reputation, almost to the point of being shut down by the government.
   They were taking no chances now.
   No chances included hiding their specialized human weapons in the clothes of businessmen, commoners, and tourists.  No chances included making their specialized human weapons into stereotypical brats.
    Millis reached Terminal D1 and unslung his backpack in the departure lounge, taking a swift seat on a peeling leather chair.  Forty-five seconds until he would be joined by Hyn.  Ninety seconds till Rea.  Millis dug into his pocket and pulled out a touch phone, glancing at the time.  Four minutes until boarding began.
   Hyn had sent him a text: The next idiot who tries to pickpocket me will get it.
   Millis raised his eyebrows and texted back, In an airport?  Good luck.
   Tell Damion he can have my Anschutz 22 if I don’t make it.
   A faint grin touched Millis’ lips.  Will do.
   Another text popped up on his phone's screen a long moment later.  Shades, button-down polo, slacks, and dress shoes.  All black colors.  With backpack.  Watch for him.  He's been following me since the parking lot, and he's suddenly pulled ahead.  I told Rea to stay fifteen meters off.
   Millis instinctively and casually raised his head and cast a quick glance across the hall, his Hunter mind mechanically telling his conscious brain that there were fourteen people in the corridor, none of them Hyn’s stalker.  A Southern Excellian woman giggled at a swarthy, attractive friend, and Millis watched them sashay off before turning back to his phone.
   Hyn had sent another message.  He stopped.  I think he wants us both.
   More than likely.  Get over here.  Tell Rea to stay put, even if things get violent.
   Roger that.
   Hyn came into view a few moments later.  His tie was loose around the collar, giving him a dressy, casual look, but at the rate he was walking, the natural, laid-back atmosphere delivered by his looks was replaced with determined single-mindedness so typical of Hyn.  When he took another pair of steps, Millis saw why.
   The man was right behind him.
   And it wasn't hard to tell that he was moving with a purpose.
   Despite the human pressure tracing his footsteps, Hyn took a seat in a relaxed manner, a seat directly behind Millis, and unfolded a newspaper.
   The stranger sat down on Millis' right and turned straight to him.  Millis could see out of the corner of his eye that the man had shoulder-length black hair pulled back in a ponytail and tied with a dark purple ribbon.  A large nose fit his strong jaw.  White teeth, bright eyes.  Whoever this man was, he was no slob.  Even the clothes he wore couldn’t conceal his good health.
   For some reason, Millis thought he looked vaguely familiar...but he couldn’t place the man.
   "Millis Rider, Hyn Reuler, I need an assassin."
   Indifferently, Millis continued to type on his phone, filling in the necessary blanks of a report on Hassan's death so he could close the job and receive the money sum as soon as he reached Haven 1.  Hyn flipped a crinkly page and replied apathetically, "So do the rest."
   The man sighed.
   Millis surmised it was from relief.  Based off of his amateur persistence, the man had probably been second-guessing himself about his targets.
   “So is it a deal?”
   A deal?
   Millis let out a noisy breath in scoffing.  The man obviously had no experience with a mercenary field before.
   “Details, sir.  Details.”
   “Er...right.”  The man cleared his throat.  “The wage is a two mil in total, so a million each--”
   “In Excellian currency?” Hyn interrupted, “In cash?”
   The black haired man raised his eyebrows.  “Well...I was thinking you’d want it in Excellian cash, but if you’d rather do something else...”
   “That’s fine,” Millis answered, giving his friend a pointed glare, “How many?  And who?”
   “Two.  It’s politics, so I’m expecting you to not get caught and so is the rest of the world.”
   Unabashed by Millis’ earlier unspoken rebuke, Hyn bumped the back of Millis’ head with his own skull and said in an undertone, “Ten bucks say it’s Consil Narcos.”
   “You’ll be beyond ten dollar bills once you make the kill,” the man countered, “Far beyond ten dollars...”
   He didn’t continue.
   An awkward silence fell into the air.
   “Wait...Consil...”
   Understanding fell a few seconds later, and Millis tightened his eyebrows, shaking his head in amazement when realization dawned.  Hyn whistled behind him, settled into his air of calm, and turned another page.  “Really.  Consil Narcos is the target?  Hah!  You owe me ten, dude.”
   “No.”  Millis’ denial was flat, and the stranger chuckled.
   “The job is already mapped.  Every step is planned out.  I have hands on the inside, and they will do their uttermost to ensure a smooth cover in case things go wrong.  Not to be cocky, but this job is way overpaid.  You’d be a fool to not take it.”
   Pocketing his phone, Millis folded his arms across his chest and flopped back in his seat.  Two minutes until boarding began; the man was intentionally cutting their time close.
   Two-mil for Consil Narcos, pre-orchestrated.
   It seemed so...easy.
   Too easy.
   Too impossible.  The Consils and Dibanes of Excellia were strictly guarded.  There was no way that the stranger could have found a way to break through the lines upon lines of defense, not unless if he was from inside, which would make sense.  Only another Consil or Dibane would want to eliminate one of their own.
   “What’s the catch?”
   “There is no catch,” the man replied cooly, “Narcos and his wife Narcam.  Dead without blood.”
   “Just dead?”
   “I’ll take care of the bodies,” the man agreed.
   Millis closed his eyes in deep thought, allowing another sixty-seconds to slip away as he examined the prospects from every angle.  A nudge against the back of his skull shook him from his thoughts, and he heard Hyn say, “I’m in if you’re in.”
   Millis stood, facing the stranger, an accusatory glare on his face that masked the pleasure he felt to be hired so soon.  “I want the plans, and if I don’t think it’s doable, you can find yourself another assassin to squander your life’s savings on.”
   “Where do you want them?”
   “In my hand.  Now.”
   As a flight attendant began to call out class fliers, the man shrugged on his backpack as he stood and walked into a store on the direct other side of the hall.  With raised eyebrows and building confusion, Millis watched the man browse a sports magazine, then put the issue away.  When he walked out of sight, a papery-yellow flap was poking out from behind the magazine.
   Millis felt his slight grin return.
   So maybe that idiot does know a thing after all...
   “Recall Rea and board the plane, Hyn.  I’ll be with you in a moment.”

   For the sixteenth time during the past half-hour of the flight, Hyn ran his fingers slowly through his already rumpled, golden hair.  There was mild exasperation on his face, but Millis wasn’t concerned.  He had learned over the years that any and all frustration belonging to Hyn was for show alone.
   The male never felt a loss; his greatest asset was adapting to new situations.
   Hyn chewed on the end of his pen and then tapped at a section of the floor plans with it.  “This is a seven second window.”
   “You can’t get from a door to up the stairs in seven seconds?”
   “If his measurements are right, I’d have to sprint this.”
   “Oh, woe are you,” Millis droned, “You actually have to get off your lazy butt and work.  Sounds horrifying.”
   Hyn glared at his friend and muttered sarcastically, “Have no idea how I’ll do it.”
   Rea turned from her laptop, letting her intelligent eyes wander the array of paper spilled out in front of the three on their trays.
   “I just can’t believe you two got hired again.”
   “Must just be our natural awesomeness,” Millis replied dryly before turning back to his intense study on the papers.  Rea said something, undoubtedly a cutting remark, but his mind was already focused elsewhere.
   It was impossible to assassinate a Consil or Dibane.
   The four families lived in four separate mansions, fifteen minutes’ drive from Excellia’s capitol building, each house located due north, east, south, and west.  As a general law, each family was required a bodyguard, and Millis knew that a straight-on attack at the bodyguard would have unknowable results.  The teaching methods in ELI were the same methods used for the trained bodyguards, so Millis would practically be fighting an older, stronger, more experienced version of himself.
   And some families had more than one protector.
   Narcos, particularly, had four bodyguards, three males and one female.
   Specifically, the papers said that Narcos lived in the South Manor.  Every door was constantly locked, first by electronic handles, then by reinforced bolt.  If the electronic handles were tampered with at any point in time, an alarm was sounded.  If the windows were opened from the outside or shattered, an alarm was sounded.  The main rooms were constantly monitored with surveillance cameras.
   Narcos had four bodyguards, three males and one female.
   It was impossible.
   And yet...
   Millis blinked the glaze out of his eyes and fixed his attention back on the papers.  He skimmed the plans once, then twice, checked another time for any possible mistakes.
   Somehow, that man had found a way in.

   During a forecasted and particularly heavy storm two days from present date, the power would be put out in Central at exactly a quarter before six o’clock ante meridiem by paid electricians.  All security precautions--the windows and doorknobs--would be eliminated by the outage, putting the bodyguards into action.  Nice to have that kind of money throw around, Millis mused darkly as he thought of his employer’s face.
   At six o’clock, the first male bodyguard would finish his sweep of the exterior grounds and go inside, downstairs, to bed.
   One eliminated.
   The female guard would already be asleep and would stay asleep for another quarter hour until her turn for the exterior sweep came.
   Two eliminated.
   Two other guards, both male, would have been making routes on the main-floor with flashlights since five while the family slept upstairs.  They had the morning shift, and, regardless of the outage, their paths were planned so that one was always in view of the elevator and stairs at all times.  To get to the family, it was necessary to get past them, a task virtually impossible.
   However, at eight-hundred and thirty seconds after six o’clock, the second male would be coming from the elevator towards the living room when the front doorbell would ring and a mailman would be asking for a signature before dropping off an empty package; the exchange was to last seven seconds at least, and consequently, the guards’ routes would be offset seven seconds.
   The mailman would leave, the guard would continue past the front door, Millis and Hyn would enter and, from there, finish the job.
   Seven seconds to get from the front door to the top floor; that would be their critical moment.
   Upstairs, they would make the kills and escape, unnoticed, through the windows.

   Millis leaned back into his seat and accepted a cold bottle of water from the snack cart that passed by; he didn’t realize how parched he was until the liquid was pouring down his throat.  Downing the entire bottle in one long draft, Millis set the empty container on his chair and closed his eyes again, letting his thoughts wander.
   Two million...
   Who was that joker anyway?
   The man had been right; they were overpaid.
   The job was just too simple.
   Millis felt his mind automatically turn over the possibilities and motives behind the work, but try as he could, he was left in the dark.

~ ~ ~

There you have it!
I have a lot of Author's Notes to come.  :D

Write on!
Clove

12.13.2013

Dark darkity dank darkness - my favourite

Hi, all of you!

I'm sorry, I'm sorry.  I have to admit that for about the past month, I have been writing nothing but little bits and pieces for this amazing pantheon of authors.  Honestly, it's like my dream-come-true to be writing around with my brother, my best male friend, my best female friend, and some of my most beloved mentors, and, yes, I've left this corner of cyberspace shockingly silent for masses of time.

In the blog above, I'm writing as one of my favourite types of characters: that dark guy who creeps everyone out, doesn't give an anything, and is generally over-powered.  If you'd ask me why I like writing as depressed, misunderstood, hating charries, I'd probably tell you that I just get far more inspiration from my friends who are moody than I do from people who are cocky, happy, or just plain hot-headed.  To me, dark charries are easy.

To you, however, that might not be the case.  That said, if you ever want to try your hand at writing a mirthless, malevolent character, here are some of my personal tips for doing so:

     --Choose your music very carefully.
Moody people are, duh, moody.  That means that they will drive into all range of emotional highs, including anguished arguments, bitter tears, and deadly silence, and, if you don't have a soundtrack ready, your music can very easily force your dark character into Mr. Happy-Go-Lucky.  If you have a Pandora (they should pay me for advertising, right?  x)), I have a station for the artists: "Globus" and "E.S. Posthumus", and I highly recommend that station for writing.  After weeding out those annoying fiddle/electric guitar stomps and bizarre Indie tracks, I've got a list of powerful, dark, glorious tracks that work wonderfully well.

     --Write according to gender.
As a stereotypical whole, dark guys are more powerful and prone to the anger side of things while dark girls are more mystical and prone to tears.  I am driven crazy when I read someone's dark male character who weeps like a baby or when I read someone's dark female character who is as bold-hearted as Iskandar the Great.  Be consistent!  I consider it better to stick with this stereotype than to shoot for creativity and miss your mark.

     --Logical reason is necessary!
Okay, guys, if your character is dark, please make sure that he/she has a reason to be dark.  A torturous backstory is always nice, and continual reminders of past struggles are golden nuggets when you're writing as a depressed darkie.  However, it's also necessary to give your charrie a philosophy.  Take the most heretical thoughts that are humanly possible and twist them into the mind of your character along with other perverted attitudes and ideas.  The more dark one is, the more logical reason for darkness is necessary.
A good question to ask yourself is this: Would I myself become an apathetic, grim version of myself is such-and-such-backstory occurred?  If the answer is no, then the answer for your character is no.  Don't try to stretch it, and don't be afraid to come up with a miserable, miserable, miserable existence for your darkie.
They need it.

     --Keep your character looking awesome.
Another great fault (along with gender mis-matching behavior) that is common to dark characters is that they are too moody and end up looking pathetic.  I admit, so far, I've very decently beat up Jace, the Dark Elf I'm writing as for the aforementioned blog.  Being a male teenager, he has a serious temper that gets him beaten by his surrogate father, and he just recently happened to pick a duel with a demon killer, so, at the moment, he's not doing so hot physically.  It sounds like I'm violating my own tips, aren't I?  I've made Jace too moody, and now he's looking pathetic.
Not necessarily.
You can beat your character left and right, but, as long as you keep a healthy amount of passion in that character, he/she won't care for whatever conks him in the head.  Throughout all of these fights, Jace hardly bats an eyelash at his wounds, and he appears in control during each of his battles.  In fact, he enjoys the pain because he sees little worth in a goal if it comes so easily.  (Again, that's part of his philosophy that makes him so dark.)

     --Humanity is also necessary!
Don't breed monsters, guys.
Jace has feelings too.  x)  While majorly dispassionate, Jace is engaged to a girl, and he delights in his fiancée.  When beaten, he does hold grudges, and, when spurned, he does loathe his existence too.  The trick to the balance between apathy and emotion is this: your character should have emotion, but he/she should not care.

     --Bring out those beautiful special adjectives.
Try words like: grim, dark, moody, obsidian, marble, smooth, unmoved, dispassionate, apathetic, growl, snarl, jagged, and clenched.  Work especially hard on your phrasing to give your darkie the utmost beautiful, likable darkness.  If you shoot for and achieve making your character despicable but still relatable, I promise: you will have the greatest fan group you have ever had before on any charrie.

  "He looked peaceful.  There was no rage in his eyes like there was when he was awake and conscious to the brutality of the world.  Eyes closed, he was so powerful, even in his sleep."
  "As always, Jace was leaned back in his seat with his power displayed in his lazy dispassion."
  "Jace’s finger pads began to roam his lower face: cold nails on cheeks, thumb on stubble, upper palm on silky, skin-toned lips."
  "The shadows under the muscles on the side of his face deepened visibly as a cloud of impatient anger descended on his face."

If you ever do end up using these devices to write your own darkie, give me a notice so I can read what you wrote!  I'm excited to see what comes out of your guys brains as well as mine during this adventure.

Write on!
Clove

12.09.2013

The Importance of Studying Books

Okay, so, in my last two posts, I've just bombarded you with ten of the best books in the world.

Now what?

Well, guys, if any of you are into playing musical instruments, you probably know that it's good to listen to music as well as to play it, and, if you'r really into playing musical instruments, then you probably study the sounds as you listen to them.  For example, if I hear Mr. Itzhak Perlman play Allegro and Prelludium and if I find myself enjoying his vibrato, I'll then ask myself, "What is he doing to get such good vibrato?"

The same rule applies to reading and writing.
("Study".  Hai, hai, I realize I put that word in this blog about writing which is supposed to be fun, but, hey, as much as I dislike the leg-work, finals are coming around the corner, so I figured I might just hide the necessary thing in the bustle of Christmastime school-work loads.  x))

If I read a book that I really like (say...Beowulf, for example), I, of course, have to ask myself, "How is the author of Beowulf obtaining so-and-so?"

If the so-and-so pertains to a particular character, I keep my eyes peeled for description paragraphs on the character and other minute details that pile up over the length of the story so that I myself will know how to write a character of the same kind by using the techniques of another author.  Even if the antagonist is the really well-written so-and-so, I can still "study" the author's writing.

Now, don't think that this process is grueling and Asian and meh.  Oftentimes, you can hide the most dramatic "fangirling" by putting on your steel-rimmed, bridge-taped, fifty-ton bottle-glasses and saying to all your accusers, "What?  Fangirling?  No, of course not.  I'm merely studying the text so that I can expand my own writing capabilities."  Then, when they're all gone, you take off your nerdy glasses and enjoy an in-depth study of your favorite character/setting/scenario with all of your squealing laughs and suppressed giggles.  It. just. works.  x)

Of course, every author is different, so I can't specifically tell you what to be looking for.  However, if you have a book that you really enjoy, your studying should circulate around the question I presented above: How is the author of such-and-such obtaining so-and-so?
Once you have that down, again, keep your eyes open as if you were the book's editor and fangirl, fangirl, fangirl study, study, study.  When you think you have some of the proper writing techniques, vocabulary picks, and sentence structures, try your hand at mimicking the author of such-and-such by writing your own so-and-so.

Good luck!

Write on!
Clove

12.06.2013

My Favorite Books...really. - Part II

Hello, hello all!  It's yours truly, back with part two of the books that you MUST read to complete your education as a human being.
(By the way, I was also thinking: if you're stuck when it comes to Christmas presents, these books would all make awesome gifts.  Spread the intelligence, peoples.  x))

5. The Ranger's Apprentice Series - John Flannagan
In contrast to the previous classic/educational novels, there's The Ranger's Apprentice Series, a group of twelve books, following the life and adventures of Will Treaty, an archer and Ranger for the king.  John Flannagan is like Rick Riordan with his pacing; he knows the exact measurements of tension and humor to put into his writing, and it moves at such a speed that, once you pick up a book, you never want to put it down until you reach the end, and, even then, you want the next book in the series right after that one.  However, unlike Rick Riordan, who centralizes around mythology, John Flannagan works in a medieval setting, utilizing black, eerie forests, maidens, and single combat duels with a modern-day sense of language and humor.

4. The Mysterious Benedict Society Series - Stewart Lee Trenton
With only three books, this series is...just...indescribable.  Stewart plays mind games with his reader by riddles, morse code, and mysterious elements.  Nonetheless, I still wouldn't call this series a mystery series because, while the characters in the novels are constantly seeking to understand and decode various patterns, the plot still flows, and the characters are never bogged down with long interrogations or hunts for clues.  Oh, and did I mention that these characters are like...superhumanly awesome?  Introducing a pantheon of children: Reynie, our natural, out-of-the-box-thinking leader; Kate, twelve-year-old physical extraordinaire; Sticky, speed-reader whose brain is a fly trap for information; and Constance, a girl who is very, very, young.  (If you're hooked, then good.  Go read it. :D)

3. The Derwood Series - Jeri Massi
Do you all remember my two biggest writing walls?  I can't write religion in fiction, and I can't write like a male.  Well, here you have Jeri Massi, master of both.  Her charries are all young children, but those children are placed in life-threatening situations and emotionally-challenging stances.  Her plot forces them to find God, but the ingenuity and choices of her characters themselves shine out so that God isn't a mere plot-device.  Ohhh, guys, Jeri sees life as a child, making her charries totally capable of your fullest empathy; she has this amazing sense of humor; her descriptions are vivid and never boring; her books range from city-life to San Francisco to out in the country to underneath Wisconsin in the sewers; her baddies are shockingly bad but never obscene.  If my words haven't gotten you excited, have some steering fluid and BE EXCITED.

2. Fahrenheit 451 - Ray Bradbury
Dystopian but not depressing, Fahrenheit 451 was the Hunger Games before the Hunger Games, the Divergent before the Divergent.  In fact, if I asked Suzanne Collins and Veronica Roth if they got any inspiration from Fahrenheit 451, I'd be willing to bet that they have.  Piercing straight to the future, Ray Bradbury portrayed humankind in such realistic, shocking colors, I felt like I was slapped in the face and told, "WAKE UP.  WAKE UP."  Why?  In his novel, Ray displays a vulgar sense of violence with teens driving down streets and crashing into people for fun; he scrutinizes the result of books dying out; he shows the effects of war.  Basically, he, living back then, focused on now (which was the future for him) and wrote it out.  They're scary, the implications!  Furthermore, Ray paints us modern technological people in a manner that made me seriously rethink my priorities.  We have games, shows, laughter, chatter, but the question Ray presented is: are we really happy?  When we talk, do we really talk, or are there just worthless words flowing out of our mouths about him and her and this and that?  Furthermore, what are we happy with?  This book challenges our existence.

1. The Bible - by God
Of course, the answer to all of the questions above can be found in this book.  Guys, I don't even list this here because I want to advocate my religion.  Yes, I do, but, even more, I list this book because it is necessary.  We're so caught up with our physical lives: what we eat, what we wear, how we learn, who he is, how she looks, what to do, that we have little to no sense of gentle emotion and absolutely no care for where we go when we die.  By sacrificing our happiness for what we think is "pleasure", we're emotionally dying by suicide, and there is no self-help book that could pluck us from our hidden, unknown misery.  "Self-help" means that we're capable of helping ourselves, but the truth is...we're not.  Can a zombie read about the living and become alive again?  No.  That's why this book, written by a living God, is necessary; it shows us how to become alive: spiritually and emotionally.

So, there you have it!

Write/read on!
Clove

12.04.2013

My Favorite Books...really.

Hey all, you're back with the one and only me.

The title is shocking, I know.  I hardly dare to list my favorite books...IN ORDER...and publish the list for it to be unmovable in ages to come.  In fact, even as I sit here typing this, three massive bookshelves on my left are staring at me with hundreds, maybe a thousand, books that hate me for not choosing them as their favorite.  Who knows?  When I'm sleeping...when my back is turned...they'll kill me...by death...via...paper cut...
I can't fathom their plotting, those genius files.
However, I am going to go through with this plan, and, if I return wholly lacerated...well...I return wholly lacerated.  This list is a list of ten books that you MUST read, and, so long as you do read them, the pain will be bearable.  :)

That said...here we go!

10. The Swiss Family Robinson - Johann Wyss
I love this book for its structure.  I can pick it up, open practically anywhere, and be entertained by the wonders of island survival, a classic spin to sylvan survival elements we see in many modern day novels.  Adventure, romance, and a magical sense of solitude gently enfold this novel with delicate care that "hugs you" but doesn't "chain you".  Plus, who doesn't like hearing about ostrich omelets and kangaroo-shooting contests and melon gardens?!

9. Oedipus - Sophocles
Because it is a Greek drama, Oedipus is full of great one-liners and dialogue quotes.  The characters each have their own massive personalities, and the threats they face are interestingly fated, unlike the forge-your-own-path ideas of modern day books.  Amidst all of the mythical action, however, Oedipus sometimes feels like a comic book, a handful of memes, and a bunch of Chinese proverbs pasted together, creating a voice that I thoroughly enjoy.  It's not too ancient, it's not too long, and it's never too geeky to read a Greek drama as good as Oedipus.

8. The Witches - Roald Dahl
Everyone, mother, father, sister, brother, ehv-ur-ee-won needs a little Roald Dahl in their life.  The Witches was one of my favorites because of its adult-like quality.  Leaving behind the bustling factory of Charlie and the Chocolate Factory and the dangerous bone-crunching giants of The BFG, The Witches ascends to a sense of affection between a grandmother and a grandson that is in no way overly mawkish or dramatized.  While still walking the fine line between too cute and too scary, Roald Dahl also managed to mix in the element of love, and his execution was flawless.

7. The Screwtape Letters - C.S. Lewis
A+ to C.S. Lewis for hitting humankind right on the head.  At first, this book can seem a little confusing because C.S. Lewis is playing Devil's advocate...literally.  But once you get going, the sheer truth in the words of C.S. Lewis' masterpiece is enough to make you weep.  Mentally analytical when looking at man and ingenious when crafting his words, C.S. Lewis has been praised over and over for his books, this one being no exception.  Google his name, and you'll find professors who are C.S. Lewis fanboys by the dozen.

6. Parallel Lives - Lucius Mestrius Plutarchus
Imagine a Roman tavern where a bunch of massively-built Roman men are sitting around, boasting about their past and current leaders when a sly, wise Greek sneaks in the back and starts mentioning Greek heroes who were grander than the Roman heroes mentioned - Theseus (Greek) for Romulus (Roman), Alcibiades (Greek) for Coriolanus (Roman), and Alexander the Great (Greek) for Julius Caesar (Roman).  For each Roman name that the Romans shout out, the clever, little Greek has a Greek name with which to best the former.  A showdown of champions is what this is, and Plutarch really brings on the biography.  Colorful in description and amazing to ponder, Parallel Lives is definitely one of the coolest histories out there.

And there are your first five!  The next five will be here tomorrow.

Write on!
Clove
P.S. Were you guys wondering where I went?  Sorry, sorry, I got sucked into the RP blog I was mentioning earlier.  It's up, running, and awesome, and you can find it here.  If you all are wondering, my character is called "Jace Dracon", and he is just about the most darkest, beautifullest, amazingest thing since dark, beautiful, amazing things were created.  XD

11.30.2013

CHAPTER 3 - Author's Notes

So...what...is...up, peoples?  Everyone have a good Thanksgiving?

So let's get right to it:
--Patra Aurelianus - Her full name was gotten from the Latin word "patricius" or "having a noble father" and Ambrosius Aurelianus, an English military commander who I learned about in history this year.  She was casted off of myself, but, no, I'm not putting up any pictures since I already did in my last post.  x)
--Misha - My dad suggested this name.  Super original, I know.  I casted Misha off of Rachel S., one of my friends from Texas.

Isn't she gorgeous?

Rachel possesses the slenderness and beauty that I wanted Misha to own.  It all works out.  :)

--Catt - One of my brother's closest friends is named Cat, and I thought I'd honor his friend by naming this character...Catt.  I casted Catt, last minute, off of Scarlett Pomers because she has red hair and...that's about it.  (If you're curious, neither Catt nor Misha are going to make an entrance again...I think.)



--Syne Pryor - I named Syne off of the word "sin" and the mathematical function because all three are equally evil and yet such a serious part of this world.  For some reason, I can't remember why I gave Syne the last name "Pryor", but we have plenty of time to discuss him.  He'll be back, no worries.  x)
As for his cast...
Well, guys, if you know anything about me, you'll know I'm totally in love with the philosophical, psychotic killer: Zolf J. Kimblee, a hard-core, anime alchemist whose favorite weapon is C-4...or...any other explosive you can think of.  Needless to say, he snuck his way as inspiration into this story, and, as I've yet to find any other real-life cast who is better, I'll just post a handful of pictures of the anime character:


He's in the back of the car...


I think Zolf works as a cast for Syne because he has a certain "sleazy" look that accompanies an intelligent, fox-like eye.  Both Zolf and Syne know how to be gentle and endearing for an act, but both can also ruthlessly kill, and, behind their scheming masks, there is a world of sadistic pleasure that makes them ultimate villains.

--Myreap - Hah...okay, so about Myreap.  My dad read the chapter and asked me, "Who'd you cast Myreap off of?"  After all, Myreap is pretty good looking, right?  He's got the broad shoulders, strong arms, and lonely Josh Hutcherson eyes; I'm totally in love with my Myreap-cast, right?
Well...the answer to my dad's question is quite anticlimactic.

Myreap's casted after nobody, thus no pictures.

Hahhh...sorry, everyone, sorry sorry sorry, but it's true.  Sad to say, Myreap is not my type of guy; I sort of conjured him out of thin air and did my best to make him seem all hot and stuff, but...ewww...not my type of guy.  (On the other hand, once we get on to Hyn, golden hair, daring eyes, lithe frame, heroic aura, and cocky attitude, oh, buddy...yes.)  Again, if you have a picture that you think works, I would totally love to see it and use it to polish up my mediocre description.  :)

That aside, I wanted to make a small tip at the end of this post for the rest of you who are more devoted authors than devoted fans.
Honestly, I had a HARD time with this chapter.  I've never been to a formal dance.  Ever.  I'm a homeschooler who has virtually attended a lockdown drill and has physically attended tornado and fire drills, but I've never actually been to a prom.  I can't say I've ever been pinned up against a wall by a man, and I feel like its been eons since I last crushed on a guy.
I had no inspiration for this chapter...period.
Nonetheless, I learned that, sometimes, imagination is a good platform for writing without inspiration.  From there, an editor can help you polish up the unrealistic factors of your chapter, but you should never get writer's block due to lack of experience.  Also, if you're stuck with lack of experience, Youtube is awesome, and Google has yet to fail me.  Again, pictures and music work wonders when it comes to gaining creativity.  If you're stuck, you could also talk it over with a friend or parent or sibling, since two heads (or even one and a half) are always better than one.  x)

Write on!
Clove

11.24.2013

Catching Fire - Opinions

No, no, no, this isn't a review.  It's my opinion.
Have a very, very short synopsis and then take a load of my observations:

The first book of the Hunger Games scenario starts out with a cute family of three girls - Mom, older sister Katniss, and younger sister Prim, who happens to be chosen as a gladiator in a death match for kids.  Katniss volunteers in place of her sister and, voila, story, story, story, death, death, death, blood, blood, blood.  Towards the end of the gladiator match, she and Peeta Mellark, another combatant who loves her devotedly, are the final two survivors.  They decide to eat poisonous berries together and commit suicide rather than live alone, which causes the government (who started the games) to say that there is a change in the rules and that two victors are allowed.  They survive and live happily ever after.
BUT.
Second book.  The known "world", split into Districts, then takes Katniss and Peeta's suicide attempt as a sign of rebellion against the government; the Districts rebel themselves.  With some subtle, intricate manipulating, the government is made to do exactly everything that they think would stop the rebellion, but all that happens is...yep, you guessed it: more rebellion.  As part of their effort to stop the rebellion, the government decides to hold another gladiator match with combatants who have previously won.  (Do you not understand why they'd do that, or how it would help stop the rebellion?  Yeah, well, NEITHER DID THEY.)  Katniss and Peeta are, again, thrown into another fight to the death and MORE story.  Yay for derth!  It's EBWEEWARE!  It's EBREEWUN!  DERTH DERTH DERRRTH!!!  GYAHAHAHAHAHahzzz...

...

Okay...now...have you guys seen the movie?  No?  Well, once it comes out for rent, and you get it for a dollar, here's some things to think about:

Katniss is the equivalent of... 
Amy Lee of Evanescence

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 Brutus is the equivalent of...
The Heavy from Team Fortress 2

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 Beetee is the equivalent of...
Eugene from Adventures in Oddessey

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 Peeta is the equivalent of...
Everyone's bloody favorite puppy dog

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 Gale is the equivalent of...
Ahem.

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 Haymitch is the equivalent of...
BAD INFLUENCE ON TEENS, MITCHY-BOY

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Effie is the equivalent of...
THE RESURRECTION OF MILEY CIRUS MILLENNIUMS AFTER SHE DIED

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And last but not least...
 Thread is the equivalent of...
"BAHCUZ IM BATMUN."
Come on...you totally know what I mean, right?
I was just sitting there, waiting for him to say it in that low, husky Batman voice of his.

So there you have it.

Write on!
Clo--

...hah...

Okay, okay, I guess I have to say SOMETHING about the book/movie.  Look, for a movie that good this much hype and such grand reception, I can't criticize it or risk being assassinated by ten thousand fangirls.  Even a ninja so great as myself has her limits, and, with a near-fractured leg and a cough, I'm not doing too hot.  Furthermore, I enjoyed both the book and the movie, the latter of which hardly deviated at all from the book.  A few minor things were changed for time's sake, and very little was left out.  If you're super picky, then you might not like it, but I thought it made one wicked film - the intensity was high with less sorrow than the first (which, in my opinion, was an improvement), the costuming was amazing, and, of course, the pantheon of actors in the film did an excellent job.

HOWEVER...

If there's one thing I'm going to rant about, it's all summed up in one phrase:

"I wish the Hunger Games were real."

*sighs*
I...
Wow...just...wow.

Why?

Do you want to learn how to survive?
Do you want the lethal romance?
Do you want to kill?

Guys, one of the main POINTS in the Hunger Games is that MINDLESS KILLING AND KILLING AS A THREAT IS EVIL.  Didn't get it the first time?  Here it is again:

MINDLESS KILLING AND KILLING AS A THREAT IS EVIL.
(In fact, it's not killing at that point; it's murder.)

If you have your list of enemies that you want reaped in your fantasy version of the Hunger Games, well, I can promise that that will totally change when you get into the battlefield.  Life is a gift from GOD.  Do you, in your blind rage, really want to take that away?  Irreversibly?!  Furthermore, do you think that life is yours to take?  How about this: do you want the chance to prove your love to a significant other by killing someone else?  Do you think that the bond of love can be better forged in life-or-death situations?
Battle is different from the glorious montage of screaming and blood and dramatic Hans Zimmer music that media portrays it to be, boys and girls.  Battle hurts and scars and tears apart, and pride is the pointless beginning for all wars.

If you write about war, I really hope that you don't write with the idea that killing is consequent-less and murder brings peace.  If you're a fangirl and think Catching Fire is to die for, well, good for you, but, if I read another Hunger-Games-wanna-be with the ideal that says murder is satisfying, I will VOMIT.

Heh.

Okay.
Phew...
I'm good now; calling it a night.  :)

Write on...PEACEFULLY!
Clove

11.17.2013

Abbriev.

Salve, poeti!

I don't know if you're an author like me who carries a notebook and pen around everywhere.  Between restaurants and shopping malls and overheard quotes, my brain is at a loss to pick up and put to memory every single detail.

The result?


Voila.
(That page is only one in many.  I'm not exaggerating here, amicae and amici; you have my word.)

I write on the go, while waiting in lines, at school (shhh...), in the car, at meals, and in my bed at night.  In that manner, I waste no time and don't have to "get into the writing groove" to start writing.  After all, my computer and documents are only every so often available to a busy little me.

Keeping in theme with productivity, I've come up with a LOT of abbreviations for little mental notes to myself.  Generally, I'll be writing, writing, writing, and then something, some word or phrase, will strike me odd, but I won't have the materials at hand to answer said oddity, so I'll draw a tiny arrow and make a tiny note.  Sooo...if you're like me, feel free to steal and put these to use!  :)

(The first space shows what I write, the second space shows what the abbrieviation stands for, the third space shows what it means.)
- SYN - synonym - "Look up a synonym for this word later."
- RW - right word? - "Is this the right word?"
- RP - right phrase? - "Is this the right phrase?"
- DP - description paragraph - "Put in a description paragraph here when you're in the mood."
- S - spelling - "Check the spelling."
- '-' - tab - "Enter a tab here."
- 'P' - paragraph return - "Enter a paragraph return here."
- CP - check previous - "Check the document for previous recordings of the word or phrase to validate accuracy."  (Generally, this has to do with age.  e.g. Was he 26 or 27?)

Hope that was helpful!

Write on!
Clove

11.16.2013

Keeping your eyes open

Writing is a way to convey emotion.

To be human is to feel emotion.  The actions done to us and the actions we do to others arrange our feelings in intricate patterns.  The voices we hear, the sights we see, the food we taste, the aromas we smell, the textures we touch all combine into this colorful painting called life.

Writing is merely the art of taking those colorful paintings and putting them into words.
As a corollary to that rule, the best authors know the most about life, about love, about hatred and strife, pink clouds and stormy nights,  forsaken churchyards and pretty damsels and ugly witches.  They know about fires and wind and voices and silences because they keep their eyes very, very open.

Sad to say, many are turned off from writing because they "don't know what to write about", and many more stunt their abilities by keeping their eyes closed.  While photographers frame gigantic, breathing pieces of life in a single snapshot, writers need to feel those gigantic, breathing pieces of life.


Keep your eyes open, fellow authors.


Snapshots of life that are blurry are impossible to write, and, thanks to modern commodities, life has been packaged and sold with fuzz and static.

   For example, how often is music merely white noise?  Too few take the time to close their eyes and enjoy solid feeling and lyrical depth, if there is any, in a piece of artwork.  Instead, we bustle around from the mall to the restaurant, talking over the radio in the background and drowning out music with...still more music.
   Another question: do you really care for people?  How will you ever get to see the nuances of individuals for writing purposes if you gruffly greet everyone with a how-do-you-do and have-a-nice-day.  If you're asking, "How are you?" merely because it's United States politeness, you're speaking a blur of life, and the legitimate response will be equally dull.
   What about food?  I'm horribly guilty here, sad to say.  My mom's an awesome chef, and whenever meal time rolls around, I just shovel everything down my gullet in less than three minutes, not even taking the time to taste what I'm swallowing.  I'm pretty sure she could feed me cardboard, and I wouldn't even notice.  The literary result?  I'm horrible at describing food...period.
   Are these direct variations?
   You tell me.
   Think about touch and sight for a moment.  Think about your toe pads.  Are they hot?  Sweaty?  Why?  Cold and numb?  Why?  Are you wearing shoes?  Why?  Are those shoes too tight or comfortable?  Without looking, think of what the nape of your neck feels like, think of if your hair is up or down, think of a part of your body that is ticklish.  Stretch your arms out and back beside you - seriously...do it - and feel your tendons straining...
   Do you know your own body?

Authors, we are sincerely out of touch with this physical world.
If you're one to live so fast that you can't even remember what earrings you're wearing, your writing will suffer, as silly as that seems.

Just sit down once in a while and listen to music without doing anything else.  I don't mean classical opera or anything; I enjoy relaxing and tensing music together, but the catch is that I "enjoy" music.  Before you eat something beautiful, observe it and fondle it and feel floury crust warm your fingertips.  Smile and genuinely care for people around you.  Observe them.  Taste food in your mouth.  Stroke your clothes as you put them on.  Keep your eyes open and absorb the small things around you that you missed.  Let shower water bounce off your palm.  Better yet, take a bath and fill the air with the scent of bath salts and inhale the thick sauna.  Melt chocolate in your mouth before swallowing.  And most important of all?  Laugh.  Laugh hard.
There's so much to experience, we can never possibly write enough books...

...but we very well can try.


Keep your eyes open, kids.


Write on!
Clove

11.14.2013

Religion?!

Hey one, hey all, welcome back.

We're about half-way through November, and I still haven't gotten Chapter 3 up yet, and I might not until around December-ish, sad to say.  My life has pretty much exploded between driving classes, school, weddings, violin, and upcoming birthday parties, and, to add on top of all of that, I'm sick as an over-worked horse.  Fun, fun, right?

Anyway, here's an update on what's to come:
--CHAPTER 3!  My dad was supposed to edit it while he was on a business trip to Europe, and he comes home today.  Hopefully, it'll be all marked in red and ready to go.  Hopefully.  :)
--An entire forty-five page story, which will be out in three parts by next Sunday.  Again, the story is a birthday present, so...I have to wait for the birthday to roll around before posting it.  :)
--A modern day parody on The Legend of Sleepy Hollow.  I was doing this for school; it was supposed to be 750 words minimal, but I had so much fun with it, it ended up being around 2,000 words.  I'd like to edit it one more time before I get it up here.

Got all that?
I am not leaving you guys in the dust; I promise.  :)

That being said...

So...I was in one of those dream-zone of writing the other day, just a side-story idea that my brother came up with and challenged me to write, when all of the sudden, in the story, BAM--

RELIGION.

Whoa.  I stared at the screen and screwed up my face and said, "Did I just write this?"  Apparently, I did.  Guys, I've tried to write religion stories before; I've tried and I've tried and I've tried, but the words never represented what I felt relative to God.  I gave up about a year and a half ago, which I'm now certain was before I had really felt that much concerning God.  I mean, seriously?  I have shed a lot of repentant tears and have heard a lot of deep sermons between now and 18 months ago.

That said, I think I can include religion.  I've been trying, anyway...
Of course, I'm sick and tired and my ribcage is burning and my lungs are raisins and my hands are crackling with ice, so...when I'm feeling better, I might come back and look at my work and laugh and say, "Yup.  Still cheesy."
But rather than wait for my health to return, I thought I'd let you guys take a look and tell me what you think.  Still cheesy?  Cheddar?  Capable of making American mozzarella?
Have a gander.  :)

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     Agitated, Keary paced briskly to the elevator and shot towards the roof of the skyscraper.  He emerged on the top floor, took a staircase even further up, and ducked outside, letting his thoughts be swept away by the cold wind.  Mankind would put greed first, the wind took that, but he would put integrity first, the wind stole that, and he would be manipulated by the greedy?  The wind nabbed that thought away and threw it back at Keary in gusts of chilling air until his tight shoulder blades were numb and his tight forearms were numb and the gun, resting on his chest, was a block of ice.
     Man is...
     Wind.
     Man...
     Wind.
     Is...
     Wind.
     ...is...
     ...wind...gale...breeze...
     Rose.
     After the long moment drained his resolve, Keary stumbled his way over to the side of the roof and gazed over the cement wall, fingers grasping the rough edge.
     The cars were colored dots.  The people, the masses of people, were smears.  Their sounds and jeers and catcalls and honks were silent.  Just wind.  It would be a long, long, long, windy drop.
     No.
     Rose wouldn’t forgive him.
     But...
     She’d join him, wouldn’t she?
     Grace too.
     They’d all be dead.
   Why was he so unwilling to compromise?  Why couldn’t he be like lesser men just for once and burn the records?  Did his virtue make him stronger?  Did his integrity make him better?  Did his conscience’s innocence aid him in life?
     Keary laughed out-loud.
     No.
     It couldn’t, and it never would.
     Virtue made him weak.
    A preacher had told him something funny once.  “There is nothing better for a person than that he should eat and drink and find enjoyment in his toil.  A fool endures, but a wise man dies.  Life is vain, Mr. Sikora, but there’s more to life than vanity.”
     Keary looked up at the azure sky, then back down to the gray ground, up to the cotton clouds, then back down to the muddy ground, up to the transcending sun, then back to the helpless ground.
     That idiot preacher must have been right, somehow...somehow...
     Some sort of savior must exist.  Maybe not a monarchy of insane, power-thirsty gods, definitely not a group that created all the misery...no...man did enough of that himself...but one that...that...saved them emotionally.

~ ~ ~

Write on!
Clove

11.12.2013

Hey, you.

Hey.  Hey.  You.
Guys.
Guys.
Guyses and girlsees.
Guess what?  Guess what, guess what?
Guess...


...


DON'T WRITE WHEN YOU'RE TIRED.

Write on!
Clove
P.S. I put one character to sleep, moved on to another, put her to sleep as well, and put a guy from a different story to bed as well.  -_-  The Muses are not with me tonight.  ;)

11.11.2013

Why I Hate Grammar...

Josiah, my younger brother, and I make it a point to, when we bring a box of cereal to the table, turn the box to the back and read that little memo thingymerbobber that talks about how such-and-such product is the best, the most nutritious, or the most delicious.  We're both Grammar Nazi's, Warriors of the Red Pen (well, he's in training), and capable of listing every single punctuation and spelling rule that exists.  Thus, we (geeks) find a good amount of entertainment in marking out the errors on published paragraphs.

That said, I just recently finished Fahrenheit 451, my official second favorite non-spiritual book, second only to Saint Augustine's Confessions.  (At least...that's what I think...I haven't done an official list of my favorite books.  I probably should some day though...)  I noticed that Ray Bradbury, as he wrote, used punctuation only to signify pauses.  Of course, there were periods at the end of every sentence, but even every sentence he wrote didn't include a subject and a verb.

And surprisingly, I can't even say it annoyed me.

It was smooth, classic, and flowing with a pace slow enough that I wasn't just reading a blur of words, but fast enough that I wanted to re-read it as soon as I put it down to make sure I caught everything.

Even more frustratingly, I've tried to study the book and analyze the writing style so I can mimic it myself, but...sad to say...I can't.  The plot just draws me in with the fire, the funnels and water, the books, Clarisse McCellan, the parlor families, the seashells, the river, the Hound, the...the...the...

...er...

So, what was I talking about?
Right.
Why I hate grammar.
Well, after reading this book, I've found some sentences in my own stories that potentially could be broken into one independent clause and one dependent clause, but my grammar instincts prohibit me from such actions.

I want to write:

     Keary turned to Tariq.  “You knew I was going to be watching you in Samuel’s office, didn’t you?”
     “Yeah.  I guessed it.  But don’t feel bad, Keary."

But my Grammar Warrior instincts kick in, and I end up writing:

     "Yeah.  I guessed it, but don't feel bad..."

It rushes too much, too emptily, too...ehhh...it lacks the proper feeling.  I'm starting to think that in order to keep a good flow, sometimes, deviations from punctuation are necessary.

But anyway...that's just food for thought.  :)

Write on!
Clove

11.08.2013

Poetry

I am not a poet.

Out of the 10,000 hours it takes to become a literal master at anything, I've probably spent about...100 hours on poetry.  Only 9,900 more to go.  ;)
That doesn't mean I don't like poetry.
Some poems, I just look at, screw up my face, and say, "This has neither rhyme not rhythm.  WUT ID DEH POINT?!"  I'm sure I speak from naivety and inexperience and bla bla bla because I haven't worked in this particular branch of writing long enough.  Other poems, however, really hit home in a beautifully crafted paragraph of glory.  Some are sheer hilarious, some are gorgeous enough to make me sob, and some, I just respect because I know I really, really should respect if I want to say, someday, that I'm a poet.
*coughSHAKESPEAREcough*

Non-poet that I am, I pretty much chock poetry down to the art of fitting as much emotion, as many thoughts, and as many pictures as possible into as few words is possible.  I think it's a fun challenge and a delightful way to convey emotion.
If you don't think your poetry is good or don't know how to start your path to poem-dom, here are two easy tips in the art of rhythm and rhyme.

1. RHYTHM
2. RHYME.

Simple as that.

Hehehe, okay, sorry...but seriously, guys?  Poetry is put down, in my head, to just those two things.  I count each line and make sure they have the same number of syllables.

It's loathe to me to be this blunt, - 8 syllables
But gone the doe, no foe, no hunt - 8 syllables

Sometimes, I might do something tricky like...

How much longer can we wait? - 7 syllables
How much more is there to take? - 7 syllables
Take it all; I gave it all, - 7 syllables
We believed we couldn’t fall, - 7 syllables

And then we did. - 4 syllables

Where do we stand? - 4 syllables
We’re hunted now; - 4 syllables
I’ve no more plans, - 4 syllables

The rest of the poem ends in 4 syllable lines, even though I started with 7.  The point is that it flows and is readable.  Like with actual writing, read your poems out-loud and see if you have to add in any unnatural pauses.  If you do have those awkward silence, rearrange your syllables and words, add in adjectives, or change sentence structures.

The rhyming is just as simple.  In the above poem, I did a style of...

It’s loathe to me to be this blunt, - A
But gone the doe; no foe, no hunt. - A
I don’t see why you hide in wait, - B
To search what’s left except to hate. - B


The last syllable of line one (A) rhymes with the last syllable of line two (A).  B rhymes with B and so on and so forth.  Either every other line will rhyme or couplets (two consecutive lines) will rhyme.  Just as long as your rhyming pattern is fairly consistent, there should be no problems.

With those guidelines, you then smell the flowers, taste the rain, curl your toes into mud and.....

Write on!
Clove