12.15.2014

Text From Today - Frame of Mind

Today, I was challenged by my older brother to make a character bio based off of this song, but, because I'm so psyched to have my best friend back from college for the holidays, I came up with two sketches.  BOOM.  ;D  Thus, here's my best attempt at song translation and correlating story crafting.  Feel free to take either of the below ideas and run with them, mildly cliché and uncut as they are.


For now, you can stay.
Right here, we will play
until, somehow, you can find
a slightly different Frame of Mind.

Right here in my arms,
away from all harm,
you'll be safe from all the flares,
although I know you don't care.

You can lift your head up to the sky,
take a deeper breath, and give it time.
You can walk the path among the lines
with your shattered Frame of Mind.

Instead, you could always stay.
We can wait right here and play
until, somehow, you can find
a slightly better Frame of Mind.

When they say you will fall,
you can reach nothing at all.
Hide your tracks
beneath the rind
of a different Frame of Mind.

Is that what you heard?
Broken words in the dirt,
yelling out into the Sun,

"Here we come!
Here we come!"

You can lift your head up to the sky,
take a deeper breath, and give it time.
You can walk the path among the lines
with your shattered Frame of Mind.

I wish that you could always stay.
We can wait right here and play
until somehow you can find
a slightly better Frame of Mind.

You can lift your head up to the sky,
take a deeper breath, and give it time.
You can walk the path among the lines
with your shattered Frame of Mind.

Instead, you could always stay.
We can wait right here and play
until somehow you can find
a slightly better Frame of Mind

And when daylight comes through,
when the day is anew,
then it will be time
for a new Frame of Mind.

When all eyes are on you,
you will know what to do
since you will have found
your new Frame of Mind.

When you lift your head up to the sky,
take a deeper breath, and give it time.
You can walk the path among the lines,
but always know that you'll be safe.
I'll be here throughout your days.
Come find me and we will play.

~ ~ ~

MODERN DAY AMERICA SETTING
   This is the theme of an aged father whose young, ambitious son was enlisted into the Air Force.  During the holidays when the son comes back home - now feeble and indecisive - the father realizes that his son has post-traumatic-stress-disorder and can't often sleep for more than a few hours at a time, but the son brushes off each nightmare with a weak smile.
   Still concerned, the father takes his son on several outings - from the park where they played football so many years ago to the local burger place where they often shared a milkshake - and tries to instill in his son a reason for fighting: to protect those that he loves, to preserve the memories, to create a better future for progeny.
   By the time the son must be deployed again, he has a new Frame of Mind: of courage, patriotism, and overwhelming love for his family.

MEDIEVAL AGES SETTING
   This is the theme of a brother pair whose parents were murdered by a villainous force.  While the younger brother grieves, the older brother cultivates hatred until, when the mourning is over, he is restlessly preparing to take revenge.  Soon, the younger brother finds out about his older brother's plans and attempts to stop him from taking such drastic action with such twisted motives.
   "If you think murder will help you heal grief," the younger brother pleads, "you'll end up just like them."
   However, the older brother is resolute, and, on the day of his departure, the younger brother sadly reminds his older brother - who he know he will lose just as he lost his parents - that safety will always be at home.

Write on!
Clove

11.16.2014

An Excerpt from DWBSN Reworked

Hullo one, hullo all~

It has, indeed, been a long time, hasn't it?
Life for me is intriguing, as always: a mixture of tedious, educational mundanity, nostalgic and sentimental pain, and ridiculously hilarious and absurd social ventures, which means, yup, I've been writing and writing and writing between the hours of school and violin.

Muchos emotion = muchos words.

Currently, as I've mentioned, I'm redoing Death Would Be So Near, which has been absolutely fantastic.  Two major changes that should be noted: I believe I'm going to change the title eventually because the title DWBSN, which my twelve-year-old brain thought was epic, makes absolutely no sense.  Also, I've decided to change the name "Deidre" to "Silvia".
(...aaand, for those of you who didn't follow my writing career when I was twelve and have no idea what I'm talking about, CONGRATULATIONS - you still must have your sanity.)
All such and such to say, I'm writing a new novel based off of my old novel DWBSN (and putting my old one with Millis, Pleibea, and Patra on the back burner because I do that with all stories: I get inspired/uninspired in bursts).  Right here, I've got an excerpt from said novel that I'm posting because 1.) I don't know if it'll ever get into the end product, 2.) I love it too much to let it go unpublished, and 3.) it represents a lot of the feels in my life right now.

So.

Introducing~
--Skain Wolfe, ENTJ: a gang leader's son, a Darky (i.e. a member of an emo school club),  and the total genderbent version of me.

dark-ebony, nearly-black hair
brown eyes that look like the steel color of a gun at night and like golden maple syrup in the day
pale skin
lithe, hard-muscle frame

dominant, stubborn, charismatic attitude
either 100% self-inflated or 100% self-incriminating at all times
expert tactician for his gang, less expert at coping when things go awry (because things so rarely go awry for him)
addicted to power
humility issues

--Silvia Thornton, ISTP: a "Christian" living a double-life for adrenaline-junky purposes, a Riser (i.e. a member of a popular-kid school club), and the recipient of Skain's undying, entertaining love.

tan, tousled hair
green-brown eyes that basically include every shade of a summer forest after a warm rain
cream-hued, clean skin
small, thin frame

thrill-seeking, resilient, rational attitude
80% reliable friend, 20% explosively-energetic episodes (in which getting drunk and into fights is quite common)
expert manipulator, less expert at being feminine
addicted to adrenaline
issues...she's just got issues, this one.  x)

So, without further ado, welcome to the wonderful world of my this-probably-won't-even-get-into-the-final-edit Death Would Be So Near excerpt except-that-I'm-changing-that-name-soon-and-if-you-have-suggestions-le-comment-box-is-below~!

*gasps for air*

~ ~ ~

SKAIN'S PERSPECTIVE

     By the time we’ve reached the Kranks, I can barely see straight.  The day was stressful and exhausting, but, worst of all, the day condemned me more fierily, earnestly, and accurately than anyone has ever accused me before.  On the clean, northern side of town with shallow, excited teenagers in a mesh of hot colors and shining lights, I realized - it took me all that to realize - that I’m hardly human.
     Yeah, I play the part, maybe, but hours of acting have left me dry, and the truth - that I’m a heartless killer with no guilt - is battering me worse than the cracked road is beating up Silvia’s car.
     Rubbing a hand against my face, I close my eyes and drown in the murderous voices of my conscious that remind me of how many bullets, when, where, the bruises, the roaches, the girls, and everything else criminal that I’ve done in the Kranks as Dad’s valuable pet.  I’m too tired to think nicely about myself; I’m too convinced otherwise to even try, so I don’t.
     Eventually, Silvia drives up to my house and parks, shaking me gently and obviously desiring some attention, but I avoid her alluring gaze and gather up my stuff as she asks, “Did you have fun?”
     I nod stiffly.  “Yeah, thanks, Sil—“
     My voice cracks, and I clear my throat, trying to take the haggardness out of my voice as I say, “I really enjoyed myself.”
     Unconvinced, she turns to me with a playful, accusatory glare, and I hastily open the door, not even taking the time to kiss her goodbye as tears begin to well in my eyes.
     “Bye, Sil.  I’ll see you tomorrow—”
     “—hey, Skain!“
     Ignoring her disappointed pleading, I close the door before she can call me back or see my face - and run; running past my house, sprinting into the forest that borders our perimeters, and crumpling on the ground as a sob wracks my chest.  My whole body tightens; I’ve not cried in years, and I don’t know what’s wrong with me now, except I keep hearing myself screaming in my mind, and I keep feeling under my hands the sensation I receive when I impact flesh with a knife, and I keep facing my own violence and darkness against the white backdrop of those perfect, loving teens who invited and included someone who is only alive for killing, manipulating, and strategizing.

     I’m a Darky, yes.
     …but I’m more than that.
     I’m a terrible person.

     I’m a terrible person.

     My knife finds its way into my hand, and, through blurry vision, I rip off the spiked bracelet that hides my only tattoo: the word SUBJUGATED in white ink, and begin to cut at my forearm and at the marking, teeth grit to the pain, throat closed to my tears.

     Blood and hurting.
     It’s all sedation.

     I just want to be sedated.

     Silvia finds me in a few minutes like I assumed she would, and I straighten and scrub my face rid of tears quickly, but I know she could hear my high-pitched keening sounds.  As if walking in a minefield, she sneaks up to me and sits on the cold humus in front of me, not touching me and not saying anything.  I keep my head bowed, embarrassed and angry for some reason, though I don’t know what with.
     Emotions are useless in the Kranks, so, whenever I feel them and I don’t like it, I take a knife to myself or swallow some Ritalin, but I’m not proud of my coping methods, and the fact that I can feel blood slithering into my palm bothers me.  When she sees the damage that I’ve done to my skin in the dim twilight and pieces together why I was wearing long sleeves in the nice weather today, she reaches forward and grabs the dirty knife out of my hand, pitching the weapon a few meters away into the forest.
     I open my mouth to object, but don’t trust myself to speak, so she speaks for me, directly and seriously and calmly.
     “Skain, what’s wrong?  Did I…do something?  Why are you so upset?”

     Upset.
     Because of me.
     My heartlessness.
     My past.

     “Please, Silvia.”  Aggravated by her altruism, I climb to my feet and pace off into the forest, finding my knife, wiping the blood on my shirt, and then pocketing the weapon.  “Go home.  I’m fine.”
     “Yeah, like heck you are,” she snaps.  Hoping nimbly to her feet, she grabs my cut-up wrist tightly, and I cut off a cry of alarm as her nails dig into the deep lacerations I drew on myself.  “People who are fine don’t do this, Skain.”
      I unhook her thumb with my good arm and release myself.  “Well, I’m fine now.  Please leave me alone.”
     “Why?” she retorts, “So you can go inside and keep cutting?  I don’t think so, idiot.”
     “Sil, I’m not in the mood to be babied.”
     “And I’m not ‘babying’ you.  I’m telling you that it’s fine to be weak and to admit that you need help sometimes, so quit acting like a fool and let me help.”
     Silvia faces me, her hands on her hips, her chin stuck out slightly.  Caught in the moment and dulled by my tears, I let my gaze wander across her face in the dim light of evening, her perfect features and the shadows of her collarbones.  She stares back at me, stolidly and then with a softer expression after a second, and I take a step towards her, fingering her warm chin with cold fingers.  Green eyes wide, she watches me, and I slowly, carefully, press my mouth against hers, eyes closing to myself and body loosening in sorrowful pleasure, but another tear slithers down my face when I realize that I’ve never loved anyone in my life as intensely as I’ve loved Silvia.
     …and yet she doesn’t know what I’ve done.
     And how could I tell her?
     Tell her that I lost my virginity when I was eight, that Dad himself gave me my tattoo when I was ten to remind me of his total authority over my life, that I’ve killed and hospitalized more people than most Towner criminals could ever dream of killing and hospitalizing.  She doesn’t realize what I’ve done, and she doesn’t realize that, for all the show that I put on, I’m unable to even save my sister from her torturous life.

     I can’t protect Silvia.
     I can’t love her.
     I shouldn’t have even helped her in the first place.

     Tasting salt between our lips forces resolve back into my actions, and I pull away with a small noise of angst and feel guilt wash over me again when Silvia tries to follow, her hand reaching to hold me close.

     “I’m…sorry, Silvia.”
     Yeah.  No luck trying to hide the agony in my voice now.
     “Please go home, Sil.”

     She crosses her arms with a return of weaker determination, but I take off quickly and lock myself inside and sprint up to the loft, peering out to the driveway in time to see a defeated Silvia make her way slowly to her car.  For a second, I’m tempted to throw open the window and call out to her that she’s beautiful, more beautiful than all of the altered sluts I’ve met in the Kranks and more beautiful than the forest in autumn, and that I love her and I need her and I can’t possibly manage without her.

     …but rationality stops me -  I can’t let myself have her, defile her, and ruin her with myself - and so I leave the window when she’s gone and gingerly wash the sticky, crusted blood off my arm, falling into bed even though it’s not even seven yet, tired and ashamed and more internally devastated than I’ve been in my whole life.

~ ~ ~

Write on!
Clove

10.04.2014

A Poem - Ugly Duckling

Right now, I'm just a fledgling.
I have no crown or ring.
They call me Ugly Duckling,
but that name's incomplete.

I might still cling to pondweed.
I might have small, gray wings,
but under-estimate me
and straight-up wrong you'll be.

I'm "shy" - because I'm busy
seeking victory.
I'm "weird" - because I'm absent
chasing silver dreams.

I don't have time for playing.
I don't have days to sing,
for, soon, I'll take to flying
with broad, white, glossy wings.

And, when I'm in the sky,
I'll see my home below.
I'll see young ugly ducks like me
and call to them hello.

And, unlike all of you,
whose pleasure will be spent,
who cannot understand
our thought-provoking bend,

I'll know the pain they feel.
I'l feel the laughter gone.
I'll show to them what they'll become:
like me, a regal swan.

Write on!
Clove

9.21.2014

Word Crimes...in song form…so you NEVER FORGET THEM.

For your general entertainment and pleasure:


Write on!
Clove
P.S. Okay, so, fun stuff, I was reading through Death Would Be So Near (an old story of mine) the other day, and I decided that I'm totally going to rewrite it so that a.) the dialogue doesn't sound like it was for a Dora-episode-gone-sour, b.) I'm not ripping right out of the Hunger Games in the setting (I'm switching to gang culture instead), and c.) I can give another shot at including religion into writing.  ^_^  Excited?  YES.

9.07.2014

A Sad Announcement

Hey guys,

Well, I have, as the title suggests, a sad announcement.

Last week, I got all of my classes, and, so, my junior year has officially started.
…and, frankly, I don't have time for anything extracurricular anymore.  :\  Thus far, I've had two mental/emotional breakdowns and a couple of I-need-to-drop-a-class-crisis moments, and Asian me is working hard under tight parental supervision to manage a bursting-at-the-seams full schedule and ignore all of the self-doubts drowning me.

Basically, that all means that this blog is going inactive for about a school year.  Naturally, if I do have time to blog, I will post lengthy, thoughtful, vent-ish posts, but, for now, school has become my liiife, and I don't want to have you all waiting in this corner of the internet world for no reason, peering around and asking what happened to me.

I promise; I haven't died.

…yet.

Write on anyways, guys, and I'll, Lord willing, be back soon!
Clove

8.24.2014

Advice to Twilight characters

So, a long, long time ago in a galaxy that seems to be nonexistent, a friend asked me to write a review on Twilight by Stephenie Meyer.  Being the level-headed, sane person that I was at the time, I said no.  (The implication: people who do write reviews about/choose to read Twilight are...?)  However, way too much time has passed since the request, and my sanity has long since vanished.
Yes, guys.  I did it.

It took me about a year, but I managed to swallow the first novel in the Twilight Saga.

Now, I thought and I thought (for about half a second) whether I wanted to write a review, critiquing the novel, or if I wanted to write a review, praising the novel, but I decided that because I'm not particularly fond of assassination attempts that I would do a different sort of reader response: I'd write down several tips of advice (and some other extraneous comments) to characters from the first book.  (However, I did end up writing a review on lustful-romance based books here if you want my serious take on Twilight's moral/spiritual side.)

Disclaimer: spoilers are included.
Disclaimer: if you try to murder me for this review,  I am not held responsible for any blood, bruises, or broken bones that you may receive in my "self-defense".

Aaand...without further ado...



     1. TO ALL THE "VEGETARIAN" VAMPIRES: So...apparently, smell is a big deal to you guys, right?  Like...smell sets you off, and smell makes you hungry, and smell turns you into a blood-drinking monster.  ...so...why don't you just keep clothes pins handy to wear when you're in risky situations involving blood?  I mean, honestly, I'm not a very original girl, but this solution came to me before Edward had even finished sniffing out Bella in the forest.

     STORY LOGIC.

     2. TO JACOB: BRO CODE, Mother Seal, HAVE YOU HEARD OF IT?!
     3. TO MIKE: BRO CODE, Mother Ugly, HAVE YOU HEARD OF IT?!
     4. TO THE CULLENS: Okay, I get that you're all super strong and fast and whatever, but I guess your brain had to compensate in order to give your bodies all that power or something because, I mean, really.  You're taking Bella, a normal human, to watch a baseball game up on a mountain...during a THUNDERstorm?!  Screw those flipping vampires; aren't you taking into consideration that, with her luck, she'll get struck by LIGHTNING?!

     HEESH.

     Now we know how Edward REALLY feels.
     5. TO EDWARD: Your vocal volume level seems to be stuck on either "murmur" or "bellow" at all times.  Please visit your nearest car mechanic as soon as possible.
     6. TO BELLA: You can - believe it or not - describe your boyfriend without using the words "stony", "cold", and "perfect", and you might actually at least appear to have an IQ over 20.
     7. TO EDWARD: I don't know what's WRONG with you, idiot.  I mean, goodness. bloody. gracious., the girl is in the HOSPITAL with PAIN MEDS.  BITE HER.  MAKE HER A VAMPIRE.  Then you get her forever!  Isn't that what you want?!  She won't feel a THIIING, but, NOOO, we already clarified how you REALLY feel, and, obviously, you wouldn't care if Bella grew old and died as a withered raisin granny.

     RIGHT.

     8. TO BARBIE AND KE--I mean...BELLA AND EDWARD: I...don't...understand...either of you.  Your relationship seems to be entirely based off of the fact that you both are super hot and intimidating in each others' eyes, because, I mean, for reals, Bella, could you still love Edward if he looked like Barney and was in the throes of raging diarrhea?  Mhm.  Mhm.  Mhm.  Relationships are built on more than scawy bodies, geniuses.
     9. TO STEPHENIE MEYER: I'm sorry in advance for what I'm about to say.  Apparently, since you're world-renowned and whatever, I should be taking a hint from you, but, honestly...the last four years' collection of entries from my journal are FAR more exciting than your...book.
     For example, you expounded on Edward's clean, smooth skin quite a good bit, which is fair enough, but, when you're mentioning his skin in every single description paragraph of him, I...just...like, any girl with an IQ over 20 (which doesn't include Bella, I sadly understand) notices more than a dude's skin.  Even the small things - the shadow that forms in his jaw when he grits his teeth, the acute veins along his forearm, the round vertebrae that peek out of the hem of his shirt on his sinewy neck - those can get us more than markless skin.  Just.  Saying.

Write on! ...but, if your name is Stephenie Meyer, please.  We're good.
Clove

8.16.2014

Dearest Diary~

*le doctor infomercial voice*

You have a poor writing life and
--you run or move around quite a bit without really feeling tired inside
--you feel an urge to tell personal sob stories to strangers
--you mope
--you eat a lot of junk food
--you feel as if you can't feel a single emotion and can feel every emotion all at the same time
--you snap at people more than normal
--you want to cry, but you can't

If you have one or more of these symptoms, you may have to take a non-journalling-itis test!  This disease is very serious and rampant amongst authors who spend too much time experiencing life without the necessary means to expel their emotions.  Do not take this message lightly!  Avoidance will lead to death!  (…eventually…)  Once again, if you have one or more of these symptoms, you may have to do a non-journalling-itis test and begin your journalling rehabilitation sessions immediately!

*le doctor informercial voice goes away*
*back to my voice*

So yep, I'm here to blog about legit journalling today, and, before you run away, terrified that I'm leading you into some cultish writing habit, let me clarify what I mean by "journalling":
1.) You write whenever you feel like it.  I don't want you to turn into one of those psychopathic ten year old girls who ritualistically cuddles up under their blankets at night with a flashlight to jot down the meaningless things they did that day.  Just, if you've had a rough evening, if you met someone who really inspired you, if you had a great evening, an unheard pet peeve tirade, a problem that needs sorting out, anything that you feel passionately about, write about it.  Whenever.  Once a month.  Twice a day.  I don't care, just whenever you feel like you need to write.
2.) You write where it is easiest to write.  If I tried to pump out 2000+ word entries on an actual piece of paper with a pen, I would most definitely do some damage to my hands…and, you know, I'd burn through trees pretty quick.  Therefore, I email entries to myself and, at the subject line, put the date and the title of the journal entry.  When the entries come into my inbox, I file them in a folder titled "Junior Journal" (versus last school year when the folder was titled "Sophomore Journal").  It's easiest for me (and private), so I do it.  You do what's easiest for you.
3.) You write how you like to write.  Yes, I still encourage the proper use of grammar and punctuation, but you should personalize everything about your journal so that you feel like you can relax and be yourself when writing, instead of trying to format everything into uncomfortable perfection.  To be entirely honest, the only formatting rules that I have for my personal journal are 1.) start out each entry with "Dear Me" (because I'm speaking to myself) and 2.) end each entry with my name.  That's it.

Okay?  So, I'm not talking cutesy, silly, quaint; I'm talking personal, private, and comfortable.

But now presents the question as to why.  Why go into all of this effort?  Why will journalling help you get out of your non-journalling-itis problems?
Well, if you experience a lot of life without having a way to verbally, clearly vent all of your emotions, they can get bottled up and stuffed down inside of you, so that, when you sit down to write, you end up making miniature plot points about your life instead of keeping to an outline.  Journalling allows you to get out your problems and rants and squeals and debates and passionate descriptions and calm analyses onto solid paper, draining you of all that blockading feeling.
Journalling also makes wonderful character development arcs.  If you start journalling today, in a few years, you'll have quite a lot of well-written, raw emotion to work with and include into your stories in some form, shape, or fashion.

So try it out and see how it all works for you!  Or, if you've been journalling before, let me know about some journalling benefits that you've experienced in the comment box below, and, as always...

Write on!
Clove

8.09.2014

Weird Writing Problems #1

Well, I've started to have this weird problem, guys.  I write something down for my story, am satisfied with it, and then come back to look at it later, but it's gone.  The writing has been destroyed, and I can't find a backup document of what I had put down anywhere.  Of course, normally, it's not a big deal since I remember most of what I write down anyway and since I liked it so much that I can recall which words I used, but...still...

This has happened repeatedly, and I'm honestly not quite sure what to think of it.

On the other hand, I've started to get this hunch that I've got living-in-my-head-too-often-itis.  More and more often, I've caught myself lying in bed at one in the morning, too tired to actually write but not tired enough to drift off, so I think of scenes that I want to write and actually write them in my head.  When I come to my story a few days later, I expect the scene to be there, only it's not, and I don't see why it "disappeared" since I'm certain I wrote it.

Do any of you have this same sort of problem, or is it only me?

If you've got this sort of problem, you'll also know that you get a few other disappointments along the way, beginning with the obvious fact that you thought you put something down, but you didn't, and now you have to re-write it...but, also, you feel like you're getting way more writing done than you actually are.  o.o


The only logical conclusion:


I'm going CRAAAAAZY!!!


Write on!
Clove

7.31.2014

My newest conclusion

Well, I hit writer's block about as hard as any author can.  Literally nothing that I put down I liked, and nothing that I edited seemed to improve.  Naturally, all of this has been slightly scaring me in consideration of the fact that I have four more days left to write, and then my junior year of school starts.

And everyone knows that your junior year is the hardest academically...

Yay for Chemistry!
Yay for Algebra II!
Yay for AP Music Theory!   (...which I thought I'd have some head start on since I have been in music for years now, but...apparently not, according to my Music Theory textbook, which proved to me that I'm basically a music noob still...)

Anyway, my first class is on Wednesday, the 4th of August, so, if I don't post here until May of 2015, you guys will know what happened to me.



I got devoured by the mythical creature called School.



However, I have come across one conclusion that has helped me tremendously when it comes to writing while in writer's block:

Instead of writing according to an outline all the time and only writing for the set projects that you have, just write whatever you want until you get out of writer's block.

...I don't know.  That sounded a lot more profound when I was thinking of it in my head.  x)  Basically, though, instead of trying to feel what your characters need to be feeling, you get to feel more according to yourself (who should be your greatest source of inspiration as an author).  You're also allowing your mind to get out of a routine, critical view of your writing, and your writing is more creative and raw, rather than overly refined.

Anyway, that's just something I've found helpful.  While you're at it, you might even discover some interesting things about yourself, who knows?

I certainly have.  x)

But...more of my writing to come...eventually...  x)

Write on!
Clove

7.25.2014

Prepare for a Grammar Nazi conversions in three...two...one...

Social media.  Online chatrooms.  Virtual schools.

More and more, conversation in life shifts from supremely slow snail-mail to the laid-back, rapid pace of a chat box.  With this shift (and a mass of abbreviations to boot), grammar and proper English are quickly spiraling down a tube until "lol-ing" and "y u do dis" are the only surviving phrases.

Now, I'm not saying that you should trash all of your internet jokes.  Doge memes depend on poor grammar for their humor.  (For example, you can't exactly say, "The picture was taken by such a camera", "The picture included many photoshops", "The picture instilled much boredom", and "Wow" while still earning "lol's" for your genius jokes.)  In most cases, I encourage the practice of internet joking, simply because irony and puns are two strong skills that can be honed by scrolling through memes.

What I am saying, though, is that I'm about to rant on the internet because I'm tired of walking into a virtual classroom each school year and getting:

"Woe, so ur an author, Clove?  I am too!!!  I love writing, though my grammer skills always bother my parents because i corrrect them all the time on their bad english, rofl."


*cues music and rant*


THE STORY OF MY LIIIFE,
I'VE HEARD IT AAALL:
YOUR CLAIMS TO WRITING AND PERFECT FOOORM
AND I'M...
PARALYYYZED.

*cuts music and rant*

Guys, the point of the story is: if you claim to be an author, practice your skills all the time, even and especially in a chatroom.  Out of this practice, you...
1.) add more minutes to your 10,000 hours
2.) avoid hypocrisssy
3.) appear more respectable
and 4.) become a ninja at typing quickly and grammatically correct.  (To be honest, the number one complaint given to me online is, "Wow, Clove, SLOW DOWN.  Give us a chance to type as well!"  If you practice proper typing until classmates can't keep up, imagine how fast you could pump out a story; basically, as fast as you could think up the next scene, it's down on paper.  Good stuffs, yes?)

Write on!
Clove

7.22.2014

Freewriting

"If you pretend to feel a certain way, the feeling can become genuine all by accident."
Hei (Darker Than Black) ~



Feelings are fun elements, aren't they?  You think you've mastered yourself, and, the next day, you end up sobbing, screaming, laughing, trembling, blushing, and, more or less, exhibiting the emotions that are inseparable from your self.

We authors have the daunting occupation of conveying these emotions through written words in such a special manner that any reader - any reader at all - can empathize...but, indeed, this task is "daunting" because we ourselves are not devoid of feeling, and, if that feeling begins to cloud our minds, we begin to make characters who do random, inappropriate things based off of our own emotions.

For example, I'm currently working on Entropy, the sequel to a story I wrote last year, and, in it, my main character Jewel is engaged in a casual assassination mission with some of her closest friends, which, for her, is nothing short of sheer enjoyment.  However, whenever I hop into Jewel's shoes to edit the scene, I bring sobriety and brooding with me, and I end up making Jewel respond to her world with a dark cruelty...

Problematic, isn't it?

Fortunately, I've noticed that one of the easiest way to avoid this issue is to freewrite.

According to Wikipedia, "Freewriting is a prewriting technique in which a person writes continuously for a set period of time without regard to spelling, grammar, or topic. It produces raw, often unusable material, but helps writers overcome blocks of apathy and self-criticism."

Basically, then, you
1.) set a timer for about fifteen to twenty minutes (I've been so volatile recently that I've had to extend my sessions to forty minutes at least, but you'll figure out what works for you after a few sessions.)
2.) sit in front of a blank Word document
3.) think about one matter on your mind
4.) ask yourself how to fix that matter
5.) and start writing without stopping or editing AT ALL

What you'll get might look something like this:
"i promises that i would and i thought that i though t aht everything wsd dscread iver and i hate everything and im staring at  page of red letters but nooooo you have to keepin studiying because a bus eexist at schooola dne because the wrexpectations above you are crushing you so you hae to work hard tna dlways be reminded that you dont graduate for another two years and college college college oh how i want to sckp life nd just go to college no sw and my school year next year just looks to boring that i think i might die."

Yeah.  x)
Again, this is unedited, UNPUBLISHED (I published only for the sake of an example), type-as-fast-as-you-can stuff.  However, it does several things:
1.) It helps you get past the terrors of life to a settled calm of eloquence.
2.) It helps you get past apathy to an invigorating rush of words.
3.) It keeps you from editing too seriously.  When you look at your freewritten material and see all of the red squiggly lines, suddenly, your other works are really good.
4.) It breaks down publishing anxiety.  (You know, that anxiety that makes you believe everything you write must be perfect because everything will be published...?)
5.) Under all of the junk, sometimes, you find these very valuable, uncut diamonds: rough ideas that need much work and plenty of polish before they shine.  I can promise, though, that the effort is worth the reward.

Write on!
Clove

7.11.2014

Another Muse

This is heresy on a writing blog, but I'll say it anyway:

I hate reading so much sometimes.

Some books…I pick them up because they interest me and because I like the plot, but then, after I begin to see the characters begin to develop midway through, I start to despise the book because I've related to those characters' imperfections, to their struggles', but I can never see how they, or I, will ever get out of life's chains.
My older brother is different.  He can read about a book's characters like a scientist, observing them and probing them but never really growing as they grow or dying as they die.  Sometimes, I wish I could read like he reads and listen like he listens and watch the world like he watches the world: with total apathy and calculation, detached in most all ways from his heart.

Someday, too, I hope that I will write a book so relatable to human nature that people will want to stay up until three in the morning reading my book, that they'll cry when a character falls short of his/her dreams, that they'll buy my book and treasure it because of how much it speaks to their heart.

First of all, though, I have to figure out my own heart...

Write on!
Clove
P.S. I promised that my story chapters would be posted, and, despite internet-al silence, much writing for said story is occurring.  The problem is Module 7 of Chemistry, a full cadenza that needs to be written in a week, and website designing, which all keep me too occupied to really get into the "writing groove".  However, do not lose hope, oh, faithful blog reader; my art will come in time.  ;)

7.03.2014

My newest invention: Clovechés

I'm.
Sick.
Of.
Clichés.

*clears throat with a pointed glare*

Hi, everyone.

Is anyone else tired of editing out there?  *raises hand*  IIIiii aaam.  Studying for the grammar section of the PSAT to me is like doing excruciating story-editing work for hours on end, only worse, because the PSAT authors are such genius idiots that they can make sentences with absolutely NOOO structure or sense whatsoever so that you can't figure out the answer because you can't even understand their original point IN THE FIRST PLACE.


Super fun stuffs.


You know what else is super fun?


A CLOVECHÉ.


Yes, I know what you're thinking right now.  "Ummm...Clove...aren't you thinking of a cliché?", but, no, I'm not.  I'm definitely thinking of a Cloveché, which is my newest invention.  See, clichés are when you settle for being lazy and using a common phrase when you could instead better impress and inspire your reader with beautiful description and abnormally strung-together adjectives.

A Cloveché, however, is a positive term, used when you take a cliché and give it a fun spin.

For example:
CLICHÉ: She was afraid of her own shadow.
CLOVECHÉ: She was afraid of her own shadow, and her own shadow was afraid of itself.
     CLICHÉ: His heart skipped a beat.
     CLOVECHÉ: His heart skipped so many beats that he almost died.
CLICHÉ: It was too good to be true.
CLOVECHÉ: It was too good that, whether it was true or not, she snapped at the opportunity, assuming that she'd enjoy it before the hallucination faded away.
     CLICHÉ: He was as old as the hills.
     CLOVECHÉ: He was older than the hills' great-grandparents.
CLICHÉ: Every cloud has a silver lining.
CLOVECHÉ: Every cloud has a silver lining, she knew, but, of course, in the torrential rain, she wasn't able to view the money-making cloud-lacing.
     CLICHÉ: She woke up on the wrong side of the bed.
     CLOVECHÉ: She woke up on the wrong side of the bed, stepped on a Lego, and immediately hit her head on her nightstand.

Recently, my sarcasm has reached a peak, so I've been using far too many of these, but I like them, and I probably won't ever take them out because they exhibit such ingenuity, humor, and wit.  No more of those ridiculous clichés~
Now that you know about Clovechés, you will never go back.

MWAHAHAH--write on.
Clove

6.28.2014

The Big Changes

My writing life = I've been sitting at this computer since 9:30 in the morning, which was thirty minutes after I woke up and twenty minutes after I had finished making and eating my delicious breakfast of scrambled eggs and ham.  It is currently 11:30, and I still have six more pages of hand-written edits to put into the computer.  Yesterday, I did the same exact thing: spent all morning putting edits into the computer, and I expect to spend the majority of tomorrow in the evening doing more editing.

The edits, guys.

As I said, I'm making a lot of big changes into my current story, and, as I do so, I realize that some of these massive changes are creating more flow-mistakes, which will, in return, require more editing.  Yay.  So, lucky for you guys, you get to be the recipients of a rant on MY TOP-THREE, EDIT-REQUIRING CHANGES:

NUMBER 1.) WEATHER CHANGES
Because I'm surprisingly slow when it comes to plain, laid-out, it-was-in-your-face-how-could-you-not-see-it stuff, I tend to ignore weather consistency.  For example, my story's assassin school is on the Alcatraz Island of the future, and, if you've ever been to Alcatraz (I haven't, but I looked it up), you know that it is always either sunny, raining, or foggy there, but the temperature doesn't fluctuate too greatly.
Well, guess what I - genius me - did?
I made it snowy.  And then I made the snow something of a plot point.  So then, when I realized that it doesn't snow on Alcatraz...like...ever...I had to go back and change the snow.  And then I had to fix the plot point that rested on the fact that it would be snowy in Alcatraz.  And that took a long time, guys.  And this is a common occurrence for oh-so-smart me.

NUMBER 2.) DEATH CHANGES
Most of you in the crowd on the other side of the computer screen are authors, so you're not surprised, like many readers are, when characters in famous novels (*coughDIVERGENT-HUNGERGAMES-MAZERUNNER-FAULTINOURSTARS-PERCYJACKSONcough*) die.  As authors in the twenty-first century, we are practically paid to kill characters and give our readers a catharsis and an obsession as they weep over the fate of some poor dead waifu.
Hint hint, though: MY PET PEEVE IS KILLING CHARACTERS UNNECESSARILY.  If they don't need to die for the sake of the plot, why stress to kill them when I could just as easily torture my readers by torturing my readers' waifus?  =.=  As a result of this counter-cultural pet peeve, I end up killing characters, resurrecting them months later, and then deciding to kill them again as I write, rewrite, and write again and try to decide whether the story is enhanced by someone-or-another's death or wounded by the taken-up grave slot.

Now, you know, hypothetically, let's just imagine for one short little second how many changes you must make if you are to kill a character and then change your mind later.
Not cool, guys.

NUMBER 3.) PERSONALITY CHANGES
Obviously, I outline my stories.  I have a plot.  I use the plot.
...and then, generally, about 100 pages in, I begin to think, "Why...why...WHY am I using this personality type for this main character?  The plot requires an adventurous, free-thinker who is motivated to make such-and-such a decision that will move the plot forward, but my character is timid and easily used and not likely to do anything unless PAID."
Sometimes, if the paranoia continues on long enough, I give up and just rewrite a character's entire personality, which includes: thoughts, narrative, and dialogue...aaand this is what I'm doing for Patra, one of my main three protagonists in my current novel.
AND IT'S HORRIBLE.

Rawww...reee...rooo...
That vent didn't help any.
I still have oodles of editing to do.
Do you?
I like noodles too.
...aaand, I'm going cookoo.
Before I leave you, you should listen to the beloo...I mean, below:


Write on!
Clove
P.S. ISN'T THE SONG WONDERFUL?  WHY CAN'T I STOP LISTENING TO IT?!  ^_^

6.23.2014

CONTEST TIME~!

I'm baaack from vacation, having sustained some minor injuries.

*cough*

I'll be real: I was only out for two full days, but I still managed to get kicked in the solar plexus at 35 miles per hour by a wave, beaten across the legs by an inflatable (bruises...everywhere), and cut by one too many rocks (thus the above).  The theme of the week has been (to the "Everything is Awesome" song of the Lego Movie): EVERYTHING IS HURTIIING.  EVERYTHING IS PAIN WHEN YOU'RE--

Myeh, you get the picture.

Also unfortunately, two full days of getting abused by a lake wasn't quite enough time to get as much story work done as I wanted or had expected, so, while my body regenerates, not even to begin with the regeneration going on socially and emotionally, my creativity and the urge I have to always improve myself and others...all of that has gone caput into one apathetic mush.

Therefore, when I was trying to figure out how to finish up the below story and kept hitting brick walls, I thought to myself in the words of my famous ex-violin teacher: "DELEGATE."  Delegate, delegate, delegate to you, the small percentage of amazing people who read this blog and are far more creative than I am...

...so...

*evil chuckle*

Who wants to enter a contest?

CONTEST RULES:
1.) Read the below, unfinished story.
2.) Decide how you would like the story to end and explain your idea in the chatbox below.
3.) If I like your idea best out of all of the other ideas put in, you're eligible to choose any one of the following prizes:
     --An interview, starring fabulous youuu - posted on this blog
     --Any work that you've written - posted on this blog
     --A free edit by me - (up to 20 pages of Times New Romans Size 12 font)



~ ~ ~



- - - Rose - - -



Golden light flooded in through the small window
on the east wall of the kitchen, drowning the pans, dripping off the cabinets, and dropping into Rose’s curly auburn hair.  For as long as she could remember happiness, Rose could remember the sunlight, luscious and somnolent during noon’s lull, refreshing and silvery in dawn, or coal-pink at dusk.  Before the happiness, though, it had just be darkness, all day, all night; the sun had been swallowed by a beast, and she dared not take it for granted now.
Eyes wide and curious, the young mother looked through the window’s frame to the breathing backyard as she rinsed the sparse lunch dishes and stacked them neatly to air dry.
Nostalgic and inspiring, fall had begun, and along with it, Grace, her first and only child, had started preschool.  Rose sighed and smiled.  Someday, she was told, that feeling of unease would leave; her daughter would prove herself human and capable of self-dependence, and Rose could relax, but for now...
Now...no matter what she told herself, that discomfort never left.  The best therapy was a smile and the sun to keep her mind busy.
Tapping off the faucet and drying her hands, Rose left the sink and wandered into the living room.  Keary had taken her, a nineteen year old, to that room, his house, eight years earlier for an unrecorded investigation.  The now sunlit room had been, like all else back then, a solid black wall except for one burning, fluorescent light which he had shined into her face.
“Answer me honestly, and I will save you.  Keep silent, and I can’t help you, Rose.”
His voice, growling like a wolf and soaked in emotion, was still hot in her mind, deep with power and more compelling than her father’s threats had ever been.
Rose sank into the couch and closed her eyes, a hand over her stomach.  I have to...stop thinking about these things.  The pressure in her gut didn’t decrease, and Rose slid down into a lying position, clutching her torso and forcing herself to breathe evenly, in, out, in, out, as the agitation spread through her body.  They’re not good for me...
Unease.
The rays of light pierced through her eyelids, creating a swimming lake of sea-green liquid.  Heat cooled the ocean, and Rose turned her face towards it, realizing she was shivering and weak.  Alarm stabbed through unease, and Rose felt her dry, hot forehead with her palm.
Sick?
...no.  Certainly not.  Where was the forewarning, the gradual breaking?  She must just be hot...from washing the dishes with the steaming water.  Yes.  That was it.  That was why her skin felt so parched and warm, that was why her thoughts were spinning like the tornado of suds that sank down into the drain, that was why...why...she was so...tired.
Dishes.
Hard work.
Yes.
She needed to rest.
Keary Yasuji had saved her from the labor her father had chained her under.  Keary, the young man with the face of an Elioud, angelic in warrior status and rebellious as a demon.  Black hair and sharp eyes, gleaming black shoes, blood red tie, and a metal gun that he kept inside his coat jacket because he knew his line of work, the corruption in his agency and the tendencies of mankind.
She loved him so much.
Rose quit breathing.  It was taking too much effort.
She loved him more than she ever thought was possible...
...she loved him...
She...

“ROSE!  Rose...no...don't...what happened, Rose?”
Swearing, swearing, swearing.  Keary did like his curse words, didn’t he?  Rose had learned a colorful language herself from youth, but she never liked to hear Keary say such obscene utterances.  He used his every breath to be concise and lethal, which was shockingly different from her father, who rattled off every blaspheme as a vent.  If Keary was speaking foul language, he was in a foul mood, a rare mood, not one to be avoided, but one that demanded foul moods all around.
Rose opened her eyes cautiously and smiled the gentle smile of gratitude that had been painted on her lips since he had put it there.  “Keary?”  She tried to rise, but sirens shrieked her to a stop.  “Keary?”  Those sirens were so loud; Rose’s voice echoed like she was speaking into a mask...
“Mommy!”
Grace?
Rose felt her mouth, receiving the short moment to realize that there was a mask on her face before sharp abdominal pain hit her again like a bony elbow driven into her upper gut.  She heaved and swallowed the bile.  More swearing.  Medical talk of this IV and that oxygen tank.
Keary materialized above her, jaw clenched and eyebrows tight, then, just as she felt the urge to retch again, a door shut, the sirens lessoned, and darkness quickly flicked to light.
“Breathe, Rose.  Just breathe.”
She did, finding the task nearly impossible.  His hand was closing on her sweaty palm, and with the assurance of his presence, Rose let her eyes slide shut to the sound of cabinet contents rattling and sirens wailing their accusing laments.

Bep, bep.  Bep, bep.  Bep, bep.
The ECG next to Rose’s bed was constantly telling the room, telling her, that it was still at work.  Bep, bep.  You’re alive.  Bep, bep.  You’re breathing.  Bep, bep.  Your heart is pumping blood.  Bep, bep.
Just like Grace, the machine was ever eager to display artistic projects, no matter how color-clashed and ugly, to any pair of eyes that would look.
Rose dreamt of Grace, flaming-gold hair like herself and deep green eyes like Keary.  Peeping, chattering, sleeping, giggling, ticklish, skittish.  Young...very young...
Too young.
Too young to be motherless.
In her sleep, Rose took another weak breath, one that spread the black, poisoned blood in her veins a little further into her being.  She shivered, tightened her jaw, released everything, and sighed.  Fighting the agony was futile.  It was both a weight on her chest and turgor pressure in her lungs, keeping her from breathing either in or out.  Helplessness had new, real meaning.
In her white realm, the room full of bags and boxes, lights and flashing dots, Rose slept, ignorant of her pain.  Meanwhile, the stars danced from blazing intimacy to a dramatic fade-away as the majority of Pretoria city got on its feet and marched to the sounds of dawn -- car honks, calls, and music.  It was bustling out there, full to the brim with beggars and monopolies.  A heavy smog curled up into the clouds like pores released from a deadly mushroom, and smaller mimics of the dirty air rose from the smoking ends of cigarettes and exhaust pipes.  Noisy and quick, the breathing of the city was ritualistic, traditional, and alive.  Without it was death, the extra silence that barged into Rose’s room, saying she was late to her meeting with the angels of God.  You’re late.  You’re late.  You’re late.  Wake up.
The door opened, and Rose snapped out of her drowsing state, her mind screaming in response to the flare of conscious pain.  She grabbed her stomach with frail hands and blinked back tears until Grace and Keary, short and tall, could be seen clearly.
Still silent.
Rose nearly sobbed when she stirred to a sitting position and her child’s voice cried cheerfully, “Mommy!”
“Grace...”
Rose tried to expel the dust in her throat that was making her tear up.
Stop! she wanted to cry, Go away!
But what would she be screaming at?  Her poisoning?  Her mortality?  Her own face in the face of her only daughter?
Keary caught Grace’s wrist before the girl could fling herself onto the hospital bed.  His voice was tense and low.  “Remember what I said, Grace.  Remember...”
“Remember?”  Searching her memory, Grace held her arms behind her back, gazed up at her tall, lithe father, recalling those hundreds of warnings, and then looked behind her curly mass of rust-colored bangs, saying again in a very hushed voice, “Hi.  Mommy.”
“Hi, love.”
The toddler laughed and clambered up to the bed, making herself a nest in the thicket of blankets next to her mother, oblivious to the calling silence.  Just as quick, she popped to her knees and peered into Rose’s face, a tan moon with inverted craters for silky cheeks and chin.  “Are you better now?  I miss you and I want you to cook me macaroni and cheese and I want you to see my leaf collection before they all turn brown, Mommy, because, because my class went to pick them and I have an oak leaf.  Can you come home soon?”
Rose ran her thin fingers through the girl’s disheveled hair and stroked the blush from her face.  “Silly Grace.”  She smiled weakly.  “I don’t think I’ll be coming back.”
“Oh, but Daddy says--”
“Tomorrow.”  Keary shifted his weight from one foot to the other.  “Tomorrow.  You’ll leave this Godforsaken cave and never come back.  Twenty-four hours, Rose.”  Without breaking the stern mask on his face, Keary motioned Grace from the bed, ignoring Rose’s round lips of surprise.  The girl pouted and was at her father’s side with a bound, a leap, and a bounce.  Keary motioned to the door.  “Mrs. Amy is out there, waiting.  Have fun at school, Grace.”
“I will, Daddy.”
No look, no laugh, no tears.  She left like the last gust of summer wind that dropped everything at the mercy of the icy winter.  Rose barely had time to hear the door click before Keary was at her side, taking a seat on the edge of her bed, loneliness in company sweeping her off her feet as he said, “Amy, the mother of one of the girls at Grace’s school, is taking care of her on my request.  I don’t want to endanger Grace -- or any of Amy’s family either -- but I have no other option.  Rose, I want you to listen to me for a few minutes, understand?”
She nodded.
Keary rubbed his temples, slid his hand down to feel his chin, and finally sighed, a habitual prelude to unpleasant conversation topics.
“As you know, my division in the NCIC handles and files criminal records.  There’re bound to be some hideous mutts out there who, because they hold the evidence, go committing every crime.  Unfortunately, there was a pack of those dogs who came in to talk to me yesterday.  Someone, undoubtedly dead now, put in a file for a gang affiliation, and the condemned are all part of the NCIC.  The leader of the group is my coworker Tariq--”
“Tariq?!  But--”
“Shhh, sh, sh...yes, Tariq Musom.  Gang affiliation isn’t itself a crime, so I’m assuming that Tariq is also into something else, trafficking, illegal drugs, alcohol, I don’t know, but he wants me to erase the files.  No further evidence, no further suspicion.  Whatever he’s doing stays quiet.”
“But you can’t do that, can you?”
“I can.  Rose, I have access to some data bases that he doesn’t...I can do it and save you by tomorrow.”
“But...you won’t, right?” Rose collapsed into her bed again, her vision blurring from tears and from toxins.  A long, still silence burned into the air as she assimilated what she was: a hostage, a liability, a weak point used against Keary.  “I’m...”  Folding her hair around one shoulder, Rose opened her eyes and looked up at Keary.  “That is what I am, then...”
Keary bowed his head.  Jet black hair fell forward, curtaining his deep-set eyes with shadows.  Rose looked at him, his tight neck, his solid jaw, his pink lips that she knew so well, and felt her own soul shudder in broken will to save herself and violate morality or die and leave Keary to an unknown fate.  There was no change of emotion in that hard, black-clad figure, even when she stretched out her fingers and touched his face.  He grabbed her hand and held it in his, shaking, with the quiet words, “I told you it might happen, Rose.”
Tears came.  One.  Two.  Louder.  Three, four, five.  Uncountable tears.  They were streams of an after-rain, flooding over the banks and irrigating the fields, then more, flooding the fields and touching the towns.  Bep bep, bep bep.  Faster and more awkward, the ECG spoke louder, trying to dispel the tense moment.  Bep bep, bep bep.  Speak, Keary!  Bep, bep.
Speak.
But there was little outer response from him to even signify that he recognized her.  Skin smooth, pale, and unmarked along his face and neck and hands, he was a stony statue without any expression of compassion.  Inwardly, he could be dying with her, walking across hot glass barefoot for her, feeling his heart ripped open for her, along with her, or he could be scoffing, deciding, analyzing, predicting, questioning, questioning Tariq, questioning himself, questioning her strength.
“I feared this...this alone since that first night...I’m sorry, Rose.  I have no other option--”
“YOU LIAR.”  Rose recoiled, the taste of bitterness permeating her mouth.  Dehydrated tears left white trails on her face, and she grabbed Keary’s shoulders with the strength she had left, shoving him away from her.  “You liar, liar, liar, lying liar, Keary Yasuji.  You have no other option?!  Where has your integrity gone?  What ever held you back when you worked alone?  Is my...my weakness the cause of your--”
Keary grabbed her mouth, too drained to look up at her and face her hatred, the slap of his palm audible and echoing.

- - -

“Get back to work, ya’ wench!”
Nineteen years old and a hundred pounds heavy, Rose gasped as a foot dug into her prominent ribs.  She felt another hand, lewd and hungry, grab at her, and a loud thump of solid fist into arm muscle.  “Get your hooks off my daughter, pervert.”
“Old man stickin’ up for his lil’ gurl, ey?”
Taking the high-powered kerosene lantern with him, Father cursed and prodded the customer out of the dank basement.  Clomp, clomp, clomp, clomp.  Their heavy boots of thunder were soon gone, and Rose was alone with the roaches, spiders, and rats.  Trembling in fear and stabbing agony, Rose clutched her ribs and got up from the muck-glazed ground.  Unlit now, there was one flickering light, Rose knew, that was installed into the ceiling and would blink in and blink out, sometimes leaving her in near total darkness for hours on end.  She gazed at it, willing it to come on, and, when it shuddered into existence after a few seconds, she sighed in relief, propping her back against the brick wall.
An aluminum sheet, part of an old still, was propped up on the other side of the small room, and Rose gazed at her reflection by the dim lightbulb.  Flaming red hair had been given to her for the long days and nights she had spent, watching the fires under the mash, and faint freckles were nearly gone from absence of sunlight.  No sun, no exercise, and little food had turned her skin the color of china and made her limbs just as breakable.
A moonshiner’s daughter to replace the moonshiner’s wife.
A few moments later, Rose heard the boots coming back.  Startled, she jerked towards the stills and faked attentiveness just as the door flung open to reveal Father’s massive silhouette taking a heavy swig from his bottle.  “Ah, lass, you can make better wild cat than yer mother, I vouch.  Uppity-up, now, and have a bite to eat and off yeh to bed.”  Then, undoubtedly to himself, he muttered as he stomped up the stairs, “Can’t work her too hard...can’t work her too hard...can’t...”
Rose followed Father, dreading the hangover he would be suffering from tomorrow.  One batch, she thought, one batch with a touch of lead, glycol, or methanol, and he’ll be gone.  All she had to do is light the liquid, watch the flame turn red, and offer it to Father.
Lead burns red and makes you dead.
That little phrase was her lullaby and her mantra and her last hope, though every time she brought murder up as a possibility, a pleading angel within her yanked her adventuresome spirit back and begged tearfully for Rose to wait.  You’ll do what, Rose?  You’ll go where?  You’ll have all of Father’s friends there to catch you and make you work for them.
     But...he’ll be gone.
He’s your protection.
He...
Father tossed a small loaf of bread at Rose.  “Didn’tcha say you liked this kind?  I got some cheese here too.  Take it, take it, go on, lass, and eat it all quickly.  Better with the grog to help yah swallow, ey?”  Rose was mute until he hit her hard and snarled, “EY?!”
“Anything you say, Father.”
Food in hand, Rose left the roaring, inebriated lion in his laughter and scurried to her “room”, a small section of the shack which was located far out from Pretoria city in the silvan hills.  Through the dirty window, Rose could see a light cover of scuttling clouds and a full moon behind the ashen blanket, unmarred by city lights or the glow of residential areas.  Father was unsuspected, proffering alcohol to homeless, unregistered folks or gang members only, and she was even more so, hidden away in the basement for most of the day and nonexistent to most customers.
Exhausted from the day’s work, Rose curled up on her pallet and inhaled the cozy scent of the currant bread that Father had bought.  She nibbled weakly on the loaf and closed her eyes, too tired to eat.

The light that woke her was so startlingly bright, she could hear its shrill ringing and feel its dry scrape on her throat as she struggled with the desire to wince or grin or close her eyes and surrender to the shaking headache that dominated her thoughts.  Apprehension was stronger, though, biting through the grogginess of her mind and gnawing on her nerves.
“Are you awake?”
The voice came neither from her front, nor her back, nor from the side, but existed in the air like low, rolling thunder, cracking and articulate.  In an attempt to perforate the darkness, Rose turned her head away from the single beam of light, stopping short when a strong hand took hold of her chin and forced her to stare straight.
“Rose Mercer, is that your name?”
Rose’s heart was beating erratically, bruising her chest with its jagged jerks as she realized her ankles and wrists were bound by thin, metallic cords to a chair.  How long had she been looking at the light?  A few seconds...or several minutes?  Days must have had passed, if not weeks.  Why had the adrenaline not faded in those months?
A dream?
Surely, this was a dream.
“Rose Mercer.”  The warm grip on her chin tightened.  “Is that your name?”
“...yes.”
The truth wouldn’t hurt her sleeping imagination.
“Then I’m going to ask you five questions, and I want you to answer me clearly and accurately, do you understand?”
A nightmare.
“Yes...”
That’s all.
“Very well.”
More silence was poured in through the ceiling by sky giants, who were busily filling the room with murky unease, and Rose wanted desperately to hide from them and their massive obsidian buckets.  In her numbness, she wondered when she would awake...
“First question.”
And then there was that voice which broke through the haze like a waterfall of liquid crystals which diluted unease with power...what did the voice want?
“Do you understand that I’m here to help you?”
“Are you?”
“I am.”
“If I say no?”
“I can convince you.”
Rose trembled at her own audacity but breathed, “Convince me.”
There was a shuffle of cloth behind her, a sigh, a hand running through hair, and the fingers on her chin loosened slightly.  “You’re nineteen years old and unhappy.  Your father makes you unhappy, your mother’s death makes you unhappy, and darkness makes you unhappy.  You’ve been living in a dank basement for much of your life.  Rose Mercer, I doubt there is very much more I could do to you to make you even more unhappy.  Please trust me to help.”
“How do you--”
Answer me.”
She stared at the light and closed her eyes, releasing her tight muscles.  “Yes.”
Another ragged sigh.  The voice sounded tired.
“I am here to help you.  Please trust me, Rose...”
Instantly, she pitied him, that voice, whatever animated shadow he was, she felt a longing to make him laugh, a longing so potent that she couldn’t possibly be dreaming.  Because he would laugh...because he was going to rescue her from her misery...because he knew of her plight, he couldn’t leave her.
Please don’t leave me.
“Second question.  Do you know that three files have been entered into National Crime Information Center’s database, asking the NCIC to examine a small acre of land, thirty-two miles west and sixteen miles north of Pretoria city?”
As quick as she had pitied him, Rose loathed him.  Her heart began to pound again, and the hand lowered to beneath her jaw, taking her pulse.  She tried to writhe away from the grasp, but it followed her and continued to feel the quick throbbing of her jugular vein.
“No.”
“Third question.  Do you know that the unregistered production and consumption of alcohol is illegal?”
“Yes...”
There was an amused laugh, quiet and short.  “Fourth question.  Do you admit to illegal production?”  Massive droplets of sweat slipped down Rose’s cheeks and landed on the stranger’s hand.  When she didn’t answer for several more seconds, he quietly reminded her, “I’m here to help you.  Don’t forget; you gave me your word to answer me accurately.  Do you -- or, simply, do you not -- admit to illegal production?  I only want one word, Rose.”
Face drained of blood, she whispered, “...yes...”
“Fifth and final question.”  That voice in the darkness, a mere murmur, was filled with more power than Father had ever possessed, and the sheer notion of defying the demand shot shudders through Rose’s spine.  “If it was necessary, would you testify in court against your father?”
Impulsively, Rose struggled against her bonds, fighting to escape.  A low moan escaped her throat, and she tasted her own salty sweat on her lips.  How could she answer?  Yes, she would testify against Father and against herself or no, she would...
She would lie in court?
The room, the light, her bondage.  Every glass puzzle piece fell into place, creating a scintillating picture, painted in blood and betrayal and portraying her in a stony, barred box.
“Answer me honestly, and I will save you, Rose Mercer.  Keep silent, and I can’t help you...”
She bit her tongue until the pain was creating a pulse across her head, then said, “If you know all this, why am I here?”
“It’s thirty-five miles as the crow flies from Pretoria to your stills; the circuitous path is much longer, about fifty miles, and the NCIC didn’t deem it necessary to stop your father’s vile trade.  I’m trying to convince them otherwise.”
“By making his daughter confess?”
“By saving his daughter first, then making certain she’ll be okay while she watches her father be arrested.”
Rose stopped fighting her bonds at his answer.
...saving...me?
“Rose, would you testify?”



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- - - Keary - - -



“No, no...Keary Yasuji isn’t expendable.  Not yet.”
“Eh?”
“Just take a quick look at this list of projects.”
“Hm.”
“The work he’s done is flawless.”
“Yes.”
“See, he knows his trade, he can teach his trade, and he knows what lines to cross and what lines not to cross.  Not just Keary, but all the ones in our division.  They make their own cuts and sacrifices; they put in their own late hours; Samuel, you should have seen them at lunch, my friend.  I swear I don’t know what they’re working for that makes them so diligent, but, ah, they’re as industrious as demons.  Keary has a wife, a little daughter, and he needs to support them.  No, no...you can’t consider laying off men like him, you see?”
“I see...”
“Now...on the other hand, you can use them and bend them as far as they will bend without breaking, right?”
“Right.”
“You can goad them on, make them run for carrots on sticks, and show them the data, yes?”
“Yes.”
“If it’s necessary, sometimes a small threat of danger gets them on the right track again, you know what I mean?”
“I know what you mean.”
Keary stared at the boxy television screen in the dark of the security room, a pale hand clenched tight on the back of the chair of the security guard on duty, Jamison.  Despite his expressionless reaction, he was inwardly roiling to see Tariq manipulate their employer so easily.  Before today, Keary had always held up Samuel as an intelligent figure, powerful and dominant and charismatic.  Standing next to Tariq’s genius, however, Samuel now looked like nothing more than a voodoo doll, a magical fabric figurine in the hands of an expert killer.
“Good.”  Pixellated Tariq bowed his head low.  “Well, I’m sorry to have bothered your work here, but I’m glad I was able to stop you from letting Keary off.  Our company really does use him well.”
“Agreed, my friend.”
Narrowed eyes fastened to the screen, Keary leaned forward an inch as Samuel offered a hand to Tariq.  They shook, laughed, and, as Tariq left the room, his gaze shot up into the security camera, piercing straight through the screen into Keary’s eyes, down into his throat, down into his toes, reverberating back up, into his brain, exploding in his chest, his heart.
Smashing his frozen lungs into a million pieces: hammer.
Blowing those dust particles to the sky: wind.
Anticipating his every move:
Tariq.
Keary grit his teeth to catch his vocalized disdain, and Jamison shook his head.
“He dun like you, Kear-eh.”
Keary stared at the screen over, one that monitored the hallways adjacent to Samuel’s office.  Tariq slid out of the huge mahogany colored doors and moved on, not even glancing at the security cameras.  Keary swore.
Was it a trick?  Did Tariq know that he was in the security room watching?  Was that whole speech a trick?
Jamison, the security guard on duty, shook his head again.  “He really dun like you.”
Hardening off his expressions, Keary nodded and pried his hand off of the chair’s back.  “No.  He doesn’t.”  A fifty dollar bill slid into Keary’s right hand, and, when he shook with Jamison, the slight crinkle of paper sliced the air, and the man’s eyes widened.
Keary was quick to put his left finger to his lips.  “In case.”
Knowledge dawning, Jamison grabbed the paper, retracting his hand.  “I wudn’t plannin’ on givin’ you away anyway, mon.”
“I’m glad to hear it.”  Keary turned on his heel, overcoat snapping behind him.  “Stay safe, Jamison.”
“You too, Kear-eh.”

He had guessed a half-dozen of them when he had spoken to Rose.  Now, seven was the certain number.  Plus Tariq.  Eight.  That was half of his division.  More information provided over the water-cooler had also proved that the safe half of the division hadn’t been contacted or aroused of the situation.
He was alone.
Police contact was out-ruled.  By the time the cops got all the information necessary to invade the NCIC, one of Tariq’s snipers would have already eliminated Rose, Grace, and, as soon as he was moved into sight, himself too.  Plus, Pretoria was a small city, germinated from the seed of a wild, mechanical tree in the midst of green and ebony nature.
That left very little to do.
The doctors had no idea what poison Rose was hosting.  He couldn’t take the risk that they’d identify the organism or compound before Tariq called on him.  He couldn’t take many risks at all right now.  August 31 was the day given.  He could have eight more hours until midnight, or he could have two until the close of the office, if Tariq was feeling impatient.
Rose had less than eight hours.
Agitated, Keary paced briskly to the elevator and shot towards the roof of the skyscraper.  He emerged on the top floor, took a staircase even further up, and ducked outside, letting his thoughts be swept away by the cold wind.  Mankind would put greed first, the wind took that, but he would put integrity first, the wind stole that, and he would be manipulated by the greedy?  The wind nabbed that thought away and threw it back at Keary in gusts of chilling air until his tight shoulder blades were numb and his tight forearms were numb and the gun, resting on his chest, was a block of ice.
Man is...
Wind.
Man...
Wind.
Is...
Wind.
...is...
After the long moment drained his resolve, Keary stumbled his way over to the side of the roof and gazed over the cement wall, fingers grasping the rough edge.
The cars were colored dots.  The people, the masses of people, were smears.  Their sounds and jeers and catcalls and honks were silent.  Just wind.  It would be a long, long, long, windy drop.
No.
Rose wouldn’t forgive him.
But...
She’d join him, wouldn’t she?
Grace too.
They’d all be dead.
Why was he so unwilling to compromise?  Why couldn’t he be like lesser men just for once and burn the records?  Did his virtue make him stronger?  Did his integrity make him better?  Did his conscience’s innocence aid him in life?
Keary laughed out-loud.
No.
It couldn’t, and it never would.
Virtue made him weak.
A preacher had told him something funny once.  “There is nothing better for a person than that he should eat and drink and find enjoyment in his toil.  A fool endures, but a wise man dies.  Life is vain, Mr. Yasuji, but there’s more to life than vanity.”
Keary looked up at the azure sky, then back down to the gray ground, up to the cotton clouds, then back down to the muddy ground, up to the transcending sun, then back to the helpless ground.
That preacher must have been right, somehow...somehow...
Some sort of savior must exist.  Maybe not a pantheon of insane, power-thirsty gods, definitely not a group that created all the misery...no...man did enough of that himself...but one that...that...saved them emotionally.
Keary turned his gaze back to the ground and was hit with a sense of vertigo.
“You’re not considering suicide, are you?”
The voice was sharp, slashing through the air, and, reflexively, Keary whipped around, gun in hand, ready to fire.
“Oh-ho!  Lookee there.  He’s ready to go.”
Tariq flashed a row of ivory teeth, blinding against his bronze skin, and sidled up to Keary, pulling out a gold-lined paper box.  Hawk-like eyes scanning the horizon, Tariq covered and lit a cigarette and held the pack and lighter out to Keary between his index and middle finger.  “Want one?”
Returning his pistol to its proper place, Keary took the pack, the lighter, and lit his stick, sucking the filthy air into his lungs.  The adrenaline began to fade.
“Well?”
“Well, what?”
“You weren’t considering suicide, were you?”
Keary turned to Tariq.  “You knew I was going to be watching you in Samuel’s office, didn’t you?”
Tariq cocked his head.  “Yeah...I sort of guessed it.  But don’t feel bad, Keary.  This isn’t the first time I’ve had to deal with the likes of you; a few of them are even my allies now.  Mr. Dysart, Mr. Peskin?  Yep, went through the same gauntlet.  No, don’t give me that look.  All I mean to say is that it wasn’t an amateur move to make, watching me like that.  See, mankind walks the same cycle over and over and over again like the little toy trains you see kids play with nowadays; mortals don’t have any ability to make their own choices.  Their only ‘off’ button is death, and they can never change their wiring.  Now, if you study history or have seen enough of these trains -- I certainly have done the latter -- you begin to predict man’s path.”
Keary growled in his throat.  “What do you know about mankind?  You’re human yourself.”
“That’s true, but I’ve deviated from typical behavior.  I am an outlier, you could say.  An oddball, a trick-shot.  I’m not what you’d call normal.”  Tariq simpered and asked again, "So tell me: were you considering suicide?"




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Good luck outsmarting my baddies, and, as always...
Write on!
Clove